Talk:Armenia at the 2018 Winter Olympics/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 15:28, 5 September 2018 (UTC)

Hi ! I will review this article for you. I will complete a quick c/e of the article first. Feel free to revert any of the changes, as I will only make what I feel are non-controversial improvements. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 15:28, 5 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Copyedit
 * Here is my copyedit. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 15:32, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Another c/e. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 15:46, 5 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Prose & MOS
 * In the lead, "The team's best finish in any event was a 42nd place mark by " - would recommend changing "best" to "highest", as finishing 42 out of 200 racers would be better than finishing 40 out of 40.
 * In the first paragraph, "Armenia became an independent nation again following" - maybe explain what you mean by "again"?
 * Alpine skiing paragraph, "skis and was thinking of dropping out of competition." - change "was thinking of" to "was contemplating"
 * Alpine skiing paragraph, "new pair of skis to Pyeongchan just in time" - change "just in time." to "in time for his first event."
 * Alpine skiing paragraph, "On 22 February 2018, Karapetyan, placing 50th in the first race of Men's slalom and 41st in the second race, finished the event ranked 42nd." - kind of a confusing sentence structure. Maybe something like "On 22 February 2018, Karapetyan finished the Men's slalom ranked 42nd after placing 50th in the first race and 41st in the second race." « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 15:46, 5 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Images
 * No images used, except country flag, which is PD. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 15:28, 5 September 2018 (UTC)


 * References
 * References all look good. Reliable and cited in-line. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 15:46, 5 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Overall
 * Overall, everything looks pretty good. Let me know if you have any questions. Will place on hold. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 15:46, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review. I've made the aforementioned adjustments. Please take a look at the "Background" section again, is it fine or do I need to just remove the "again" word?-- Cheetah  (talk)  16:40, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Makes more sense now. I made a quick c/e. Everything looks good here. Passed. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 16:44, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks!-- Cheetah  (talk)  16:58, 5 September 2018 (UTC)