Talk:Armin Frieder/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 19:39, 15 November 2018 (UTC)

Review
Will review this. Article is short so shouldn't take me too long. Stay put. MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 19:39, 15 November 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review! I will get to 2011 Matamoros mass kidnapping as soon as I can. Catrìona (talk) 04:34, 16 November 2018 (UTC)

Lead

 * – Can you link yeshivas here? I know it is linked before, but it should be linked on the first mention. Most of our readers will not know what this is.


 * – The body paragraphs mention it was an opposition group, but there is no mention of it being underground/covert.
 * Reworded

Early life

 * – DOB is missing. It is mentioned in the lead/infobox, but unsourced in the body. Please add it somewhere in this section with an appropriate source.
 * Mentioned and cited.


 * – moving → moved
 * Rewrote


 * – World War II, right? I would mention that instead, since I was confused if the independence mentioned in the lead was a "war" too.


 * – Might sound a bit picky, but is there a way you can spread out the citations so they back up the exact sentences they support? Having [1][2][3] at the end isn't very helpful for readers who may want to know exactly what source supports what claim. Whenever possible, we should cite immediately after a claim, per WP:PAIC.
 * Spread citations a bit.

The Holocaust

 * – Is the "with" intended? Or should it read "prewar acquaintance Jozef Sivák"? Also, please correct spelling acquaintence → acquaintance
 * This is correct, except the spelling which has been fixed

Postwar life and death

 * – Armin → Frieder
 * I thought this is correct based on SAMESURNAME? Emanuel Frieder is mentioned in the previous sentence.