Talk:Army Service Forces/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 17:43, 11 October 2021 (UTC)


 * "The Northwest Service Command, in September 1942." - sentence fragment
 * ✅ Added missing word. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "ports of embarakation" - extra a in embarkation
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Lutes is lined twice in the staff divisions section
 * ✅ removed duplicate links. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * The position of Director of Administration did not work out, and it was abolished in November 1943 - this appears to be the first mention of this exact title; it likely needs a little more explanation
 * ✅ Re-worded. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "and Major General Dawson Olmstead was relieved by Somervell on 30 June 1943 and replaced by Major General Harry C. Ingles, a West Point classmate" - the others you specifically state the position held, but not for this one. Recommend doing so
 * ✅ Added. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * " Roosevelt had nominated Major General James H. Burns," - wrong link for Burns
 * ✅ Unlinked. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "The principle was that they were customer was always right," - something is off here
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Is there a map of the service area boundaries that matches those present in the wartime boundaries? Colorado, Arkansas, and Louisiana vary between the 1921 map and the wartime table
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "The program ultimatyely - c/e
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Was gonna make this change myself, but wanted to make sure first - are the three references to Marshal typos for Marshall?
 * ✅ Corrected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * Sources are all reliable and formatted well
 * "File:Harry C. Ingles.JPG" - date of 2012 is obviously not accurate for the original work; needs a more specific source than just the War Department if possible
 * ✅ Changed date. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
 * "File:CairoConferenceParticipants.jpg" - source link is dead
 * ✅ Added archive link. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  07:32, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

That's all from me for GA, placing on hold. Hog Farm Talk 04:52, 12 October 2021 (UTC)