Talk:Arthur Adams (comics)/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: 21:06, 30 June 2014 (UTC)

Overview
Prose: See below Resolved

Sourcing: See below Resolved

Coverage: No issues

Neutrality: No issues

Stability: No issues

GA Result: On hold for seven days Passed

Details

 * Early life
 * "His father was a loadmaster in the United States Air Force, and as a result, his family, which would eventually include four younger brothers"..... maybe Adams and his parents and four younger brothers would read better. If his brothers' names are known, I'd include them.


 * Career
 * Longshot and X-Men
 * "Reviewing the first issue for Amazing Heroes, R.A. Jones, who was not fond of the writing, said, however" is a bit of a mouthful. Try something like "In a negative review of the first issue for Amazing Heroes, R.A. Jones wrote"


 * 1990s monster and creator-owned work
 * "Although the Legend imprint ceased in 1998, Monkeyman and O'Brien continued to appear in print, sometimes in crossover stories with other comics characters, as in Savage Dragon #41 (September 1997) by Erik Larsen, and Gen¹³/MonkeyMan and O'Brien (1998), both published by Image Comics, the latter of which Adams wrote and drew for Wildstorm Productions" needs to be sourced
 * The portion after "In 1996 Dark Horse Comics published Art Adams' Creature Features" needs to be sourced


 * Influence
 * This section should just be one whole paragraph


 * Personal Life
 * "Regarding religious beliefs" → "regarding religion"

Discussion
I implemented all the changes you recommended except these two:


 * RE: Longshot and X-Men I thinking calling it a "negative review" is a characterization, which would violate WP:NPOV/WP:NOR. The fact that the reviewer liked the art so much that he considered it a saving grace for the book makes such a characterization complicated. Distinguishing the reviewer's reaction to the writing from his reaction to the art, I think, clarifies this for the reader. What do you think?
 * Maybe Jones criticized the writing would be better.  22:52, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
 * Done. Nightscream (talk) 00:59, 1 July 2014 (UTC)


 * RE: 1990s monster and creator-owned work Any creative or narrative work, such as a film, TV episode, book, etc. can be its primary source for its content and credits, as indicated by WP:FILMPLOT, WP:TVPLOT and WP:BOOKPLOT. The material in question pertains to the books' credits, which is all detailed in the credit areas of those books, which indicate who created them. Am I misunderstanding these guidelines?
 * My impression was that outside of summary sections for books, films, shows, and videos, there should be citations at the end of each paragraph. If this idea goes against the guidelines you mentioned, however, then never mind.  22:52, 30 June 2014 (UTC)

Let me know what you think. Nightscream (talk) 22:21, 30 June 2014 (UTC)
 * have a look at my 2¢ SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 00:37, 1 July 2014 (UTC)
 * Now passing, well done :) SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 04:37, 1 July 2014 (UTC)