Talk:Asafo Aumua/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 23:36, 31 August 2018 (UTC)

Hi ! If you are still interested in this, I will review it. I usually start out with a quick copyedit and then go from there. I will add my comments below and then notify you when I have completed my review. Cheers, « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 23:36, 31 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Copyedit
 * Here are my copyedits. If you disagree with any of the changes, please let me know. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 23:43, 31 August 2018 (UTC)


 * Prose & MOS
 * Please explain what XV in the first paragraph of the lead. Either use the Abbr template or expand it.
 * Link Try in the first use in the lead and the first use in the body of the article.
 * "Other than hooker, he played second five-eighth, prop, and number 8 at first XV level." - I would reword to something like "He primarily player hooker, but also played second five-eighth, prop, and number 8 at first XV level" since its the first time you mention playing hooker outside of the lead.
 * Clarify what "try of the match" means.
 * "World Rugby Under 20 Championships in Manchester, June 2016" - add "in" between "Manchester" and "June 2016"
 * Clarify what the term "decider" means.
 * Link hat-trick to Hat-trick in the first use.
 * Clarify who the "unions" are in the sentence "Representing the unions under-19 team in Taupo" - its the first time you use the team name. Should it be capitalized?
 * "and was subsequently renamed in the squad" - add "he" after "and"
 * "His scoring ability became noticed after" - reword to "His scoring ability was noted after"
 * Use the convert template for 60-meter (to yards).
 * "Aumua was surprisingly called up" - remove "surprisingly" as it is a WP:WEASEL word.
 * Link Test match (rugby league) in its first use
 * "Aumua's rehabilitation period was scheduled to be 12 weeks." - this is probably too much info for now, per WP:WEIGHT « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 02:29, 1 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Images
 * No images used. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 02:29, 1 September 2018 (UTC)


 * References
 * Reference 4 needs to include the author, Liam Hyslop
 * Reference 5 needs to include the author, Hamish Bidwell
 * Reference 6 needs to include the author, Adam Julian
 * Reference 7 needs to include the authors, Adam Julian & Steven White
 * Reference 8 needs to include the authors, Adam Julian & Steven White
 * Reference 10 needs to include the author, Nic Darvineza
 * Reference 12 needs to include the author, admin_hland
 * Reference 13 needs to include the author, Campbell Burnes
 * Please just check the rest of the references to see if an author is listed and include it in the citation
 * All the rest of the references look good and are reliable « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 02:29, 1 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Overall
 * Since this article is on a current player, please be careful as his career progresses to not give WP:UNDUE weight to current events. Some of the info in the professional summary section is borderline too much info. It's not a problem now, but may be in a few years.
 * Overall a very solid article, just the items noted above. « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 02:29, 1 September 2018 (UTC)


 * Hi there, . Thank you for your review, I've completed your list below to the best I can. Hope to hear your response soon. Cheers Kidsoljah (talk) 08:57, 3 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Hi . Everything looks good except some references still need the author. #15, 16, 17, 26 and 28. Reference 23 needs . Let me know when you make those changes and everything else should be good to go.  « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 15:09, 3 September 2018 (UTC)
 * all done. Let me know if there's anthing. Kidsoljah (talk) 02:58, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good. Passed! « Gonzo fan2007   (talk)  @ 04:13, 5 September 2018 (UTC)