Talk:Ashleigh Southern/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 03:44, 22 April 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:44, 22 April 2012 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:
 * Courier Mail and FINA World Cup link to disambiguation pages; have them link to the right pages.
 * fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 04:58, 24 April 2012 (UTC)
 * "In water polo, she is a centre forward or outside shooter position" rm position, seems rather obvious that it is, and breaks up the flow a bit.
 * fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 04:58, 24 April 2012 (UTC)
 * As a whole, she is used a good 90% of the time. Throw in the occasional Southern just to give the prose a bit more variety; "she did x, she did y" makes it a bit more laboring to get through.
 * Fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 05:06, 24 April 2012 (UTC)
 * "2010.[9][22] that finished second.[1]" sentence fragment.
 * fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 04:58, 24 April 2012 (UTC)
 * "competed against Italy in the International Series with Italy " a bit redundant, the second with Italy can be removed.
 * fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 04:58, 24 April 2012 (UTC)
 * "She also scored a goal in the friendly " a friendly would sound a bit better here
 * fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 04:58, 24 April 2012 (UTC)
 * "Australia won 13 – 5, " cut the spaces
 * fixed. --LauraHale (talk) 04:58, 24 April 2012 (UTC)

Not too much to fix. I'll put the article on hold for five days. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 01:36, 24 April 2012 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman  Operation Big Bear 15:47, 24 April 2012 (UTC)