Talk:Assassination of Iranian nuclear scientists/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kees08 (talk · contribs) 17:25, 5 February 2017 (UTC)

Response to the raised issues

 * ✅ Two minor copy edits . -- M h hossein   talk 13:27, 6 February 2017 (UTC)

I have been looking at this a bit, it is very close overall. After you expand out what is mentioned above, I will do a copyedit and we should be more or less good to go. Looks so much better now, thanks for all your time you put into it. Kees08 (talk) 06:35, 9 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Kees08: No details on the "15 January 2007" is published. Just two lines may be added. Is that OK with you? -- M h hossein   talk 18:42, 10 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Also, I don't know what more I can add to the '15 January 2007' event. Please consider that the details on who did the assassination and on the real reason behind his death is reflected in another section. -- M h hossein   talk 19:14, 10 February 2017 (UTC)

Based on publication dates, and the fact that the International Business Times itself said it is not a newspaper of record, I would recommend replacing those citations with the article it appears it borrowed content from.

I would prefer if the homylafayette source is replaced with other sources, as it is an inactive blog with no one vetting the information. Kees08 (talk) 20:47, 12 February 2017 (UTC)
 * I removed the source as you had raised concern over it. I think this form is better, too. -- M h hossein   talk 18:55, 13 February 2017 (UTC)
 * The IBT source was replaced with the suggested one. -- M h hossein   talk 13:08, 14 February 2017 (UTC)

Can we get another citation for this paragraph? "According to Maziyar Ebrahimi, one of the preparators with the pseudonym Amiryal (Persian: "امیریل"‎‎), three teams were involved in the assassination of Alimohammadi. "Some of them were on their cars watching the situation and covering the area and I was in my car in a further place from the incident place waiting to take them away after the explosion was done," said Ebrahimi in his reported interrogations."

Can we get another citation for this? - It was reported by "US private intelligence" that he died because of "radioactive poisoning".

I think we should get rid of the information relating to this in this article. "In January 2015, Iranian authorities claimed to have thwarted a further attempt by Mossad to assassinate an Iranian nuclear scientist.[4]" There really doesn't seem to be any information about it aside from the one Iranian report. The other assassinations are very well documented from a variety of news agencies from around the world. Thoughts about this?

Really, the 2007 incident as well does not seem to be covered by any of the major non-biased news agencies. They do not seem to link that with the other attacks. I think it may be best to keep the events covered in this article limited to the 2010-2012 events. What do you think? Kees08 (talk) 03:57, 13 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Kees08: As far as I saw, "According to Maziyar Ebrahimi..." was originally published by YJC. ِِDo you want me to replace that with this source? Also, please note that these details are based on a documentary which is mentioned in the article.
 * Regarding the "radioactive poisoning" issue, I found another source with same allegation. I understood that by "US private intelligence", they mean Stratfor. You can find the original report here.  M h hossein   talk 13:58, 14 February 2017 (UTC)


 * Yeah, I think there is enough information on the 2007 incident to keep it in the article. I'll take a look at all of this later in the week. Kees08 (talk) 06:40, 15 February 2017 (UTC)

Continuing review
Alright, I'll put everything left to-do below. You can ignore anything left above. If it is still relevant I'll chuck it below.

Remove supposed, the next sentence takes care of the definition: Ardeshir Hosseinpour reportedly died of gas poisoning from a supposed faulty heater,

Take US private intelligence out of quotes, and add in the sentence that it was Stratfor. I don't think radioactive poisoning needs to be in quotes either.

Change from claims and suggestions to reports: though claims or suggestions

Are all these quotation marks necessary? Mostafa Ahmadi Roshan was assassinated using "a magnetized explosive" attached to the side of his car on his way to work "on the second anniversary" of Masoud Ali Mohammadi at 8:30 morning local time "in Shahid Golnabi street in Tehran's eastern area of Seyed Khandan."

I think this is unnecessary detail and should be removed: Israel has a history of targeting scientists working for hostile regimes on technologies capable of being weaponized. In the 1960s, in Operation Damocles, Shin Bet sent parcel bombs to ex-Nazi rocket scientists working for Egyptian President Nasser.[13] Israel is also "widely believed" to have been behind the killing of scientists working for Saddam Hussein in the 1980s[13] and 1990s.[32]
 * User:Kees08: Those pints were addressed. Regarding the so-called "unnecessary detail"; These details are all from the sources directly dealing with our case, i.e. Assassination of Iranian nuclear scientists, and are used as context by the sources for erecting their claims. Do you still think they are not necessary?
 * Yeah, I still think it is not necessary. Kees08 (talk) 17:03, 16 February 2017 (UTC)
 * I did the job. However, I would be grateful to know why you thought that part was not necessary. -- M h hossein   talk 12:10, 17 February 2017 (UTC)
 * Yes, of course. Sorry for brevity before, was on my phone. It was a combination of reasons. I didn't think it flowed well in the article there, it was out of place. It starts treading into NPOV issues, as we did not talk about any other of the accused countries' histories in assassinations. I think those are the two biggest issues I had with it, hopefully that rationale seems reasonable. I'll do one final read-through of the article and if all seems well, I'll pass it. Kees08 (talk) 08:10, 18 February 2017 (UTC)