Talk:Asuka Langley Soryu/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 12:48, 15 February 2021 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article. It's kinda big so I'll see if we do it section per section like in Shinji or Rei.Tintor2 (talk) 12:48, 15 February 2021 (UTC)


 * Let's gp through infobox and lead first:


 * In creator it says Gainax created her but the lead specifies it was Anno's. It's common for anime characters to have many creators but it seems like Haseo or Kite (.hack) who were also created with assistance from other staff members but it needs to be original one.
 * Yeah, the previous version linked to Hideaki Anno, but, since Sadamoto is also mentioned, I wanted to mention Gainax. I added a "collectively".


 * The lead has the wikilink of Sadamoto twice.✅
 * Since it's a Japanese term, Tsundere could have a little explanation about what it means kinda like shonen or shojo.✅
 * Conception
 * Since this is the first time in the body you mention it, wikilink Neon Genesis Evangelion.✅
 * Seems like the third paragraph could be cut in two due its length especially because of various themes discussed.✅
 * Voice
 * I think this is the first time you link End of Evangelion. Maybe you could add the word movie or film✅
 * Appearances
 * "Asuka Langley Sōryū" the macrons shouldn't be used if the article already uses the name Asuka Langley Soryu.✅
 * Unless I'm missing something "This comes to a head when the Angel Arael attacks; Asuka, burdened by her continually worsening performance in tests, is infuriated at being ordered to serve as backup to Rei." this is the first time you mention Rei so a wikilink to her and minor description could help.✅
 * Deleted. Honestly, it was a little too in-universe for me.

That's so far. Will follow next sections later. Good work with the article.Tintor2 (talk) 13:18, 15 February 2021 (UTC)
 * About Rebuild, since it is mentioned her relationship with Kaji here, should the tv series section also mention Asuka has a crush on him?✅
 * Tried my best.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 14:03, 15 February 2021 (UTC)

Nice. Moving on: That's all. Nice work. Just revisit these parts and I will gladly pass it.Tintor2 (talk) 14:30, 15 February 2021 (UTC)
 * Characterization and themes
 * In general her inferiority complex is quite big. I think the manga even made her feel like that again when Kaworu was introduced so could be repeated less. Maybe moving it to her relationship with Shinji could be more helpful.
 * Cultural impact.
 * "She did well in various polls on best anime pilots" seems a bit informal. Try "She appeared in popularity polls..."✅
 * "she also ranked 16th among the characters Anime readers would "rather die than marry" This seems to lack the creator of the poll.✅
 * I tried my best with Characterization and themes, too.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 15:29, 15 February 2021 (UTC)