Talk:Athletic Bilbao in European football/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 10:44, 25 September 2018 (UTC)

I'll have a look at this one, will post review as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 10:44, 25 September 2018 (UTC)

Initial review

Lead

 * Bilbao > Bilbao, Spain
 * Fixed.


 * Why is La Liga in italics?
 * something in my head told me foreign names should be italicised? Must have been wrong, fixed.

Traditions

 * "tragic 1920s star Pichichi", tragic seems a somewhat WP:PEACOCK word.
 * Only word I could think of to summarise his short life without going into unnecessary detail. But I agree anyone interested can just click on the link to his article. Fixed.

1950s: The Magyars and the Babes

 * End of the first team needs a source
 * the Real Madrid bit? Seems a bit unnecessary. Added anyway. If you meant something else, sorry, please correct me.


 * Is it suitable to use A.C. Milan as the team name, the club's current players all appear to use simply Milan when referring to the club. I'm not overly familiar with Italian naming, so I'm assuming it's similar to piping out F.C.?
 * Wasn't sure if I should show the prefix to differentiate the city (also linked in the same sentence) from the club, but I agree the team is referred to solely as Milan. If you think its OK like that, great. Fixed.


 * Link European Cup, first mention outside the lead can be included, per WP:OVERLINK.
 * Fixed.


 * F.C. Porto > FC Porto
 * Fixed.


 * "famous winger", famous would be seem to be another WP:PEACOCK word.
 * Fixed, changed to 'international'.

1960s and early 1970s: Diminishing returns

 * "by contrast, two years earlier Athletic were 5th but were not awarded a place)." Is there a known reason why they weren't awarded a place despite finishing higher?
 * The Fairs Cup had a confusing entry system not based on league position until 1969 which I don't fully understand (did Bilbao hold a trade fair between 1962 and 1964 which suddenly made Athletic eligible?). Have removed the whole mention of the thing instead of trying to go deeper into it.


 * Ref 14 could probably be moved to the end of the paragraph as it would appear to support the information simply by not listing any participation.
 * Fixed.


 * "but the quality of their league was demonstrated as domestic rivals Dinamo Zagreb went on to win the cup." Seems like a bit of a loose association there and no real actual relevance to Bilbao. Perhaps just state how far Red Star progressed?
 * Have added Red Star's fate and took out the 'quality of league' bit, but I do think it's worth a brief mention that a club from the same country won it, particularly since its Yugoslavia rather than one of the 'big' leagues.


 * "after receiving a bye to the quarter-finals", do we know why they received a bye?
 * Luck of the draw. Have added it like that, not sure if there is a more technical way to express that?


 * The Liverpool section of the fifth paragraph seems like a very long sentence. Perhaps start a second sentence at "When that failed to provide a winner"?
 * Fixed as suggested.


 * "or specifically the selection of coloured cards", could this be explained more? For example how do you win? Picking the right colour? Also, is this comparable to tossing a coin?
 * really not sure to be honest. The source says "The invention of penalties would come years later. Luck was in a cardboard (the coin was no longer used), green or red. «Aguirre chose red. And the other told him 'no', that the 'reds' were them. So Aguirre replied 'well what else, red for you,' [Liverpool] "recalls Iribar. And it came out green. To the next round." so it seems the teams picked a colour each, and an envelope contained one of them. And Athletic almost selected the wrong one, but Liverpool had dibs on 'their' red colour, which turned out to be the wrong choice. It seems more open to corruption than the coin (the cards could be marked and changed by slight of hand?) and in fact the Liverpool source says "Liverpool lost on coin toss!". I've amended the text slightly.


 * Unlink Cup Winners' Cup in the final paragraph, already linked previously.
 * second link was to the season article, I've unpiped it now.


 * "the club's only trip to Bulgaria to date", seems a little odd to point this out. They've been to several countries only once. Simply referring to them as "Bulgarian side" or something similar would suffice.
 * Fixed as suggested.

Late 1970s: UEFA Cup finalists

 * Italians is linked to Football in Italy which doesn't have a major relevance to the text. Also this appears to be the only time a country is linked like this in the article, I would remove.
 * Fixed as suggested, also took out another A.C. from Milan.


 * " It was the first time Athletic had played another Spanish team", in European competition? I would clarify this if that's the case.
 * Surely nobody would read that as the first time they, a Spanish club, had ever played against another Spanish club?? Amended anyway.


 * "before a 0–0 in Bilbao" > before a 0-0 draw in Bilbao?
 * Fixed.


 * Link Serie A: Fixed.
 * Perhaps expand on why Zoff and Iribar were referred to as twins. Seems a little odd to label them so and add no reason why.
 * The reasons why are in the source, but I've added to it as well.



1980s: No joy in European Cup

 * "an old foe returned to haunt Athletic", comes across as rather journalistic.
 * Yeah I know what you mean. Fixed.

1990s: Italian trips and Champions League

 * "In the next qualification in 1997", should that be "in their next..."?
 * Yeah I know what you mean. Fixed.


 * "saw Athletic finish runners-up" > finish as runners-up?
 * Yeah I know what you mean. Fixed.

2000s: Group stage experience

 * "and set the tone for a very disappointing domestic season in which the club narrowly avoided relegation", I'd drop the very from this sentence and it needs a source.
 * Fixed.


 * In general, we normally name things as they were at the time, football teams included, such as Stevenage Borough, Newton Heath, etc. So do we need Ecomax's later name? On a side note, were the club officially named Ecomax? I can't find any reference to them being named that on other pages?
 * Whatever you think for the name is fine with me. It was the owner's company but I think they were only named that for one season. They are referred to as Ecomax on Athletic's site, as Cluj on Bdfutbol, as CFR Ecomax Cluj on the intertoto wiki season article and as CFR Cluj on the UEFA website link on that article. It is less embarrassing to be knocked out by a decent club like CFR instead of complete unknown mystery Ecomax, so personally I was quite pleased when I found out it was the same club. Only small issue is the sources for that tie call them Ecomax so it might be confusing if all links are CFR Cluj.


 * "as 16-year-old Iker Muniain became the youngest player in a European match", was that for the club or ever? Needs clarification.
 * Fixed.

Early 2010s: Europa League final

 * "with an impressive 2–1 victory at home", impressive is very much a WP:PEACOCK word to watch.
 * Removed the word, but I only included it to emphasise the margin between the teams, it was 2-1 going on 6-1.


 * Final sentence under that has no refs.
 * Fixed.


 * Do we know what happened to the officers who shot the fan with a flashball yet?
 * Trial date coming up, though it will probably be a whitewash, they can't prove who gave the order to shoot so looks like nobody will be found guilty. New refs added (not saying that of course!)


 * Second half of the fourth paragraph is unsourced. Comments on Bielsa's adventurous style particularly need sourcing.
 * Fixed.


 * Perhaps merge the "unwelcome echo" sentence with the paragraph below. Seems a bit odd out there on its own.
 * Fixed.


 * Final sentence is unsourced.
 * Fixed.

2014–15 season

 * Unlink FC Porto, linked previously in the article.
 * Fixed.

2015–16 season

 * Same issue as Ecomax above, do we need the name change for Inter Baku?
 * Fixed.


 * "there the adventure ended", again sounds like journalistic sensationaling slightly.
 * Fixed.


 * Source needed for the last sentence.
 * Fixed.

2016–17 season

 * "in the process. which is also the club record for most goals by one player in a match", sentence needs a comma rather than a full stop.
 * Fixed (reworded slightly).

2017–18 season

 * Last sentence of the first paragraph is unsourced.
 * Fixed.

Player records

 * The first four notes start in upper case, while the last four start in lower case.
 * Fixed.

Managerial statistics

 * Same as above section, if you're converting them to upper case, the notes here need to be addressed also.
 * Fixed.

Statistics by opponent and country

 * Table appears to be unsourced?
 * Fixed.

Follow up
A couple of points regarding the opening.

Infobox

 * Could the record appearance holder and top goalscorer be included as in Liverpool F.C. in European football?
 * Fixed.

Lead

 * Use the full name of UEFA during the first use in the article here, so UEFA > Union of European Football Associations (UEFA).
 * Fixed.


 * Looking at the lead, it's relatively short for a fairly substantial article. Maybe a paragraph about individuals such as most appearances/goals, best performing manager etc, could be included?
 * Yeah I agree couldn't think what to include but that's a good suggestion so have done so.

In regards to that note, I would say to add a brief mention in the text of the situation (finishing third resulting in entering Europa League) in the relevant section. After that, the note could probably be removed as it is already mentioned in the results by season table as well which would probably explain it sufficiently. Thoughts? Kosack (talk) 10:07, 2 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Yeah I've just added explanations to the sections concerned.


 * Nice work, I have no further concerns regarding this article. I'm happy that it meets the relevant GA criteria, promoting. Kosack (talk) 18:14, 2 October 2018 (UTC)


 * Yay! Thank you again for taking the time to review it, aand for your constructive comments for improvements as was needed. Crowsus (talk) 18:28, 2 October 2018 (UTC)
 * No worries, you did all the hard work. It's a nicely written piece, could be an FA in the making if you have the inclination. Kosack (talk) 18:47, 2 October 2018 (UTC)

DYK
Sorry to be a pest, I do intend to apply for a Did You Know nom, did you have any suggestions on what to use? Maybe Aduriz's scoring feats or the absence of foreign players but not sure how to phrase those in the small word limit (as you will know by now, I tend to use too many words!). Cheers for anything you can think of. Crowsus (talk) 22:49, 2 October 2018 (UTC)


 * No worries, there's a couple of really interesting bits.


 * The laying of flowers at Pichichi's bust prior to a new team arriving.
 * Playing the Mighty Magyars during the Hungarian revolution.
 * Only using Basque players which is unique as far as I know (I remember Sociedad doing something similar but they've branched out now if I remember correctly).


 * For the no foreign players, something like...that Spanish football club Athletic Bilbao have competed over 30 times in European competitions despite only using Basque players? (Players of Basque origin more suitable perhaps?) Kosack (talk) 05:38, 3 October 2018 (UTC)