Talk:Attarintiki Daredi/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 04:34, 12 February 2015 (UTC)

I will review this article. Thank you. — Ssven2  speak 2 me 04:34, 12 February 2015 (UTC)

General
✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 05:18, 12 February 2015 (UTC) ✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 06:30, 13 February 2015 (UTC) ✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 12:24, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Refer Pawan Kalyan by his last name, Kalyan.
 * Refer Trivikram Srinivas by his full name, Trivikram Srinivas. Let the actresses remain with their first names.
 * Wherever the words "rumor" or "rumors" or "rumored" are, insert "u" in-between "o" and "r". It is technically correct that way.

Plot
✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 05:18, 12 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "Raghunandan is a rich yet unhappy businessman based in Milan of Italy." — Rephrase it as "Raghunandan is a rich yet unhappy businessman based in Milan." and wikilink Milan.
 * Wikilink "heart stroke".
 * Wikilink "The Government of Uganda".

✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 05:58, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Wikilink "NRI"

Development
✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 06:14, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "Milo robotic camera" — This refers to the "Mark Roberts Motion Control" camera. Wikilink "Milo robotic camera" with "Mark Roberts Motion Control".

Casting

 * Can you find a better word for "casting managers".
 * Could not, thus removed the word. Still the sentence makes sense. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 06:14, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Yeah, it does. — Ssven2  speak 2 me 06:21, 13 February 2015 (UTC)

✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 06:14, 13 February 2015 (UTC) ✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 06:14, 13 February 2015 (UTC) ✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 06:14, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "Kalyan's grandfather" — Tweak it as "Kalyan's grandfather, Raghunandan"
 * "was cast for a supporting role who sported a realistic & rugged look for his role in the film" — Rephrase it as "played the role of Sidhappa Naidu for which he sported a realistic and rugged look."
 * "Navika Kotia signed the film in April 2013 and was cast in a supporting role as the youngest sister of Samantha and Pranitha in the film" — Rephrase it as "Navika Kotia was selected for the role of the younger sister of Samantha and Pranitha in April 2013."

Themes and influences
✅ Pavanjandhyala (talk) 08:44, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "In the film, the protagonist is shown watching few classic films where the hero is in disguise trying to win over people who matter to him." — add a footnote like I have done here and rephrase the sentence as "In the film, the protagonist is shown watching few classic films, where the hero is in disguise trying to win over people who matter to him."
 * It's Mechanic Alludu right? Or is it some other film? — Ssven2  speak 2 me 08:52, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Yes, it is. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 09:49, 13 February 2015 (UTC)

Piracy
✅ Rephrased as Viral. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 09:49, 13 February 2015 (UTC) ✅ Rephrased Pavanjandhyala (talk) 09:49, 13 February 2015 (UTC) ✅ Linked Pedana. There is no article for Pedana rural circle though. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:28, 13 February 2015 (UTC) ✅ 20 September 2013 Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:28, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "and spread like wildfire." — Looks unencyclopedic, Pavan. Rephrase it or remove it.
 * "They seized hundreds of CDs and hard discs from video parlours and shops renting CDs at several places in Krishna district and took some of the shop owners known for circulation of pirated versions into custody for grilling." — Wikilink CD. hard disc, video parlour, Krishna district and grilling. Rephrase it after the wikilinks as "CDs and hard discs from video parlours and shops renting CDs in Krishna district were seized and some of the shop owners were taken into custody for grilling."
 * Wikilink "Pedana Town" and "Pedana rural circle".
 * "recovered pirated copies of the film on Wednesday." — which Wednesday? mention the date.

Home media
✅ Rephrased as registered. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 09:49, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "accrued a TRP rating" — you have a better synonym for accrued?

Critical reception
✅ I'm unsure about the final result. Suggest changes if any. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:35, 13 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Some of the words look more like quotes. If they are, explain them rather than just writing the quote.

Box office

 * In the first para, it says "The film became the highest grossing Telugu film of all time surpassing Magadheera.", whereas in the 2nd para of the sub-section "India" it states "he film was declared a blockbuster and the second highest grossing Telugu film next to Magadheera overtaking Dookudu (2011) and Gabbar Singh (2012)." I feel the first one is as the second one states that it earns ₹630 million in 18 days, whereas the first one's ref states that it is set to complete 100 days. I feel the 100 days statement is more radical.
 * What do you want me to do exactly? Pavanjandhyala (talk) 15:28, 13 February 2015 (UTC)

✅ East area and West area of AP do not have neither articles nor sub topics in the main article of AP. Except for those two, the rest have been linked. Pavanjandhyala (talk) 14:42, 14 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Wkilink "Ceded", "Guntur", "East area", Vizag, "West area" and "Nellore".

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
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 * 1) Is it stable?
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Looks better now. Congratulations! — Ssven2  speak 2 me 09:15, 15 February 2015 (UTC)