Talk:Aura (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:24, 23 December 2016 (UTC)

Lead

 * which Gaga decided to make the basis of the track. → which the singer decided to implement the basis of in "Aura".
 * Don't think this is an improvement, I have implemented it in another way. — I B  [ Poke  ] 09:38, 26 December 2016 (UTC)
 * Lyrically it → comma before "it"
 * Link "Critics" to music journalism
 * being used in the song → state "track" here for alternation
 * in which Gaga co-stars → use "the singer "here for alternation

Infobox

 * flawless ;)

Background and development

 * Development of Lady Gaga's third studio album → no full names here
 * of her second one → of her second record
 * As Gaga embarked → state "the singer" here to avoid word repetition
 * DJ Zedd → disc jockey
 * The song was also inferred → use "track" for word alternation here
 * with the actual version present in the album → insert "being" before "present"
 * Israeli weekly newspaper, B'Sheva, → remove first comma
 * Gaga had come to Zedd's studio → Gaga reportedly had to come to Zedd's studio
 * on some music → remove "some" as it's unencyclopedic here
 * She fell in love with one of the → unencyclopedic; She liked one of the
 * from the royalties off the song. → word rep., alternate here with "recording"
 * However, Gaga was against it → state "the singer" here for alternation
 * facets of the singer. → use a comma here as a quote follows
 * Not neccessarily, when its a blockquote and disjoined from the normal flow of text, we should end the sentence and then start the block. — I B  [ Poke  ] 09:38, 26 December 2016 (UTC)
 * For the quote fix all the (...) to [...], please
 * create a lyric video for the song → alternate here with "track"

Recording and composition

 * After recording started, Zedd was not happy with the initial outcome of the songs and so he suggested Gaga → After recording commenced, Zedd was not pleased with the initial outcome of the songs, thus suggesting Gaga
 * recording the songs with Zedd → recording the tracks with him
 * credit by Gaga, Zedd → credit to Gaga, Zedd
 * Zedd did the mixing → Zedd handled the mixing
 * Assisting with the whole process was Ryan Shanahan and Jesse Taub. → Ryan Shanahan and Jesse Taub assisted to the whole process.
 * Gene Grimaldi did the audio mastering → "did" is not needed here
 * Are you sure? The sentence would be without the second verb. — I B  [ Poke  ] 09:38, 26 December 2016 (UTC)
 * with the electronic beats → remove "the"
 * uttering the first lines "I killed my → add comma after "first lines"
 * A big sounding EDM production then follows suit, the beats reminiscent → A big-sounding EDM production the follows suit, incorporating beats reminiscent
 * As the song reaches a crescendo → alternate here with "track"
 * behind the aura?" with sparse backing → behind the aura?", with a sparse backing
 * and the song follows a basic → alternate here with "recording" as you've used "song" already before
 * sexualizes it with the line "Do you wanna → set comma after "the line"
 * of the word burqa are → of the word "burqa" are
 * when she sings "Enigma → set comma after "she sings"
 * Ultimately "Aura" was a statement song, about solidarity → Ultimately, "Aura" is a statement song, which delves on solidarity
 * developing a similar named → developing a similarly named

Critical reception

 * Link critics to music journalism
 * from Billboard believed the song → alternate here with "track"
 * called "Aura" as the singer's → called "Aura" the singer's
 * from Clash who wrote: → from Clash, who wrote,
 * was disappointed in the track → was disappointed with the track
 * Mark Hogan from Spin called the song → state "recording" here for alternation

Live performances

 * suit with a black scarf and a knife that wrote "HOLLYWOOD", → suit with a black scarf alongside a knife that read "HOLLYWOOD",
 * demo. (...) she belted → (...) to [...]
 * believed that Gaga had lip-synced → state "the singer" here for alternation
 * The singer dressed in a clown-like white mask → The singer was dressed in a clown-like white mask
 * white-and-black buoy like → white-and-black buoy-like
 * announcing "I've been having → set comma after "announcing"

Credits and personnel

 * Unlink Lady Gaga and Artpop here

Charts

 * flawless ;)

Copy-violation

 * 44.1% is slightly too much! Please look for the first source at the top of the list and reduce the content from it in the article's body
 * The 44.1% comes from this link. Now I was reading through WP:PLAGIARISM and in the section for "Respecting copyright" it is mentioned "Limited amounts of text can be quoted or closely paraphrased from nonfree sources if such text is clearly indicated in the article as being the words of someone else; this can be accomplished by providing an in-text attribution, and quotation marks or block quotations as appropriate, followed by an inline citation". So we can use blockquotes with attribution to the author and source. And although Earwig will be listing them as possible copyvio, one should check if its not properly attributed and then call it as WP:COPYVIO. I don't think this case will particularly pass off as COPYVIO. — I B  [ Poke  ] 09:38, 26 December 2016 (UTC)

Images and others

 * Images perfectly illustrate the article

Links

 * No problem here!

Outcome

 * for 7 days! Good luck, Cartoon network freak (talk) 13:28, 25 December 2016 (UTC)
 * please see my explanation for certain points, especially the one for COPYVIO. If its fine we can proceed. :) — I B  [ Poke  ] 09:38, 26 December 2016 (UTC)
 * Gladly passing! It's ok with the COPYVIO thing now! Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 10:32, 26 December 2016 (UTC)