Talk:Austin Church/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 20:44, 22 August 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "He was a co-founder of the company that first made the product in America." - I think some clarification on what "made the product" means will help things here
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "He was a businessman and involved" - think the word in bold is unneeded
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * The extra space between the paragraph and the early life section is not needed
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Infobox

 * Church's death place is missing from the infobox
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:08, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Early life

 * Better to use the template on the term's sole mention
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "However, Church did finish high school" - how about was able to finish
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "In 1826 he moved and practiced in Cooperstown, New York, and in 1829 he moved to" - repetition of the word "moved"
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 18:17, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Career

 * "10,000 tons" - the undefined undefined template is better off used here
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "but a recent investor in the company objected." - what were the reasons (if any) given to this objection?
 * ✅ - Williams quote. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Vulcan to the appropriate article
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:12, 23 August 2020 (UTC)


 * "to sell the Arm & Hammer Baking Soda product for hundreds of uses" - what sort of uses?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 20:23, 23 August 2020 (UTC)

Philantrophy

 * generous contributor to various charities across the country." - Any notable charities? Any type of charities?
 * ✅ --Doug Coldwell (talk) 11:31, 24 August 2020 (UTC)