Talk:Austin Nola/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 17:04, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:04, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Lead

 * I’d put in the opening paragraph that he previously played for the Mariners.
 * ✅ I had it there originally, and then another editor took it out "to improve conciseness"
 * ”drafted again in 2011” – “drafted after his junior year in 2011”
 * ”He learned how to catch in 2016, playing in the Arizona Fall League, and began playing in the position full-time in 2017.” – “He learned the position while playing in the Arizona Fall League, then began playing the position full-time in 2017.”
 * ✅ but changed to "began starting behind the plate full-time" to reduce repetition of "the position"
 * I’d mention that he became a free agent after the 2018 season.
 * ” He began the season with the minor league Tacoma Rainiers, but was called up shortly into the season, and made his major league debut in June 2019.” – “He made his major league debut with Seattle in June 2019.”
 * Link trade deadline
 * ” He began the season with the minor league Tacoma Rainiers, but was called up shortly into the season, and made his major league debut in June 2019.” – “He made his major league debut with Seattle in June 2019.”
 * Link trade deadline
 * Link trade deadline

Early life

 * The second sentence is kind of long. I’d change it to “He is the oldest son of A. J. Nola, a remodeling and construction company owner and baseball coach, and Stacie Nola, a part-time secretary.  His younger brother, Aaron, went on to pitch for the Philadelphia Phillies of Major League Baseball (MLB).
 * ” Nola took to baseball from an early age, and would play catch with his father in their backyard after school.” –“ Nola took to baseball from an early age, often playing catch with his father in their backyard after school.”
 * ”A. J. Nola” – “A. J.”
 * ”a freshman, and led” – No comma needed
 * ”Stars in Baseball” – Only capitalize baseball if it’s part of the award title.
 * Capitalized in the source
 * Then keep it that way, by all means! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:22, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”that year, with” – No comma needed.
 * ”Stars in Baseball” – Only capitalize baseball if it’s part of the award title.
 * Capitalized in the source
 * Then keep it that way, by all means! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:22, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ”that year, with” – No comma needed.

College career

 * ” After 40 games without turning a successful double play in 2009, LSU wanted to give Nola, a freshman, a chance as their starting shortstop, a decision which pushed then-junior DJ LeMahieu to second base.” – “Seeking to improve an infield defense that had gone 40 games without a successful double play in 2009, LSU moved junior DJ LeMahieu to second base and made freshman Nola their starting shortstop.”
 * Those offensive stats don’t really support that he finished the season strong and had a breakout in the College World Series (I think when it says he performed brilliantly in the LSU bio, it’s referring to his fielding.) Reword: “Nola played well at the position and batted .240 with 27 runs, 18 RBIs, and three home runs during the regular season. In the 2009 College World Series, Nola batted .250 with four runs and one home run.  He boasted a perfect 1.000 fielding percentage, making no errors in 24 chances as LSU won its sixth championship.”
 * ” championship title, with Nola being named” – “championship title, and Nola was named”
 * ”for the Mariners again” – “for Harwich again” to avoid confusion with Seattle later on.
 * ”39 games, with” – No comma needed
 * ”Tournament, but fell” – No comma needed
 * ”Award, as the” – No comma needed.
 * ”.299 his” – “.299 during his”
 * ”39 games, with” – No comma needed
 * ”Tournament, but fell” – No comma needed
 * ”Award, as the” – No comma needed.
 * ”.299 his” – “.299 during his”
 * ”Award, as the” – No comma needed.
 * ”.299 his” – “.299 during his”
 * ”.299 his” – “.299 during his”

Miami Marlins

 * I’d title this section “Miami Marlins organization”
 * ”shortly after” – I think it’s technically supposed to be “shortly thereafter”
 * I’d put at bats instead of plate appearances, since that’s what batting average is calculated from.
 * ”.232, with” – No comma needed.
 * ”sixth franchise Southern” – probably don’t need “franchise”
 * The game against Chattanooga was the third of the Southern League championship series, which Jacksonville swept. The article you’ve got doesn’t make that clear at all, but ref 37 on the Jacksonville Jumbo Shrimp page should cover that.
 * I’d switch the second and third sentences around, since the minor leagues (like MLB) don’t count playoff statistics with the regular season totals. Once you switch them around, you can drop the “There” from the start of what will be the third sentence.
 * ✅ with some minor rewording
 * ” Despite his strong performance in New Orleans, Nola was worried, during the 2016 season, that his career had stalled, and that he was not going to reach the major leagues.” - .261 with 6 home runs isn’t a strong performance. I’d reword “During the 2016 season, Nola worried that his career was stalling and that he was not on the way to the major leagues.”
 * ”expanded roster, in” – No comma needed.
 * ” and Nola began the season on the Marlins' 40-man roster for the first time in his career” – This was kind of already mentioned at the end of the last paragraph, so I’d take all this out.
 * I left it in, because there isn't a guarantee that he would have opened the next season on the 40-man roster just because he was added to it the past September. Let me know if there's some rewording I can do to make that aspect of it more clear
 * I'm fine with that. Besides, you say he began, so you don't accidentally imply he went off it then went back on. Good wording. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:23, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ” to the Triple A New Orleans Baby Cakes” – “to New Orleans, which had changed its name from the Zephyrs to the Baby Cakes.” (A guaranteed laugh, every time you mention that name!)
 * ✅ The real question is, have you ever had a baby cake? Less funny when you get the special slice and almost choke on it!
 * ”expanded roster, in” – No comma needed.
 * ” and Nola began the season on the Marlins' 40-man roster for the first time in his career” – This was kind of already mentioned at the end of the last paragraph, so I’d take all this out.
 * I left it in, because there isn't a guarantee that he would have opened the next season on the 40-man roster just because he was added to it the past September. Let me know if there's some rewording I can do to make that aspect of it more clear
 * I'm fine with that. Besides, you say he began, so you don't accidentally imply he went off it then went back on. Good wording. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:23, 13 September 2021 (UTC)
 * ” to the Triple A New Orleans Baby Cakes” – “to New Orleans, which had changed its name from the Zephyrs to the Baby Cakes.” (A guaranteed laugh, every time you mention that name!)
 * ✅ The real question is, have you ever had a baby cake? Less funny when you get the special slice and almost choke on it!
 * ” to the Triple A New Orleans Baby Cakes” – “to New Orleans, which had changed its name from the Zephyrs to the Baby Cakes.” (A guaranteed laugh, every time you mention that name!)
 * ✅ The real question is, have you ever had a baby cake? Less funny when you get the special slice and almost choke on it!

Personal life
Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 20:13, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Any info on whether he’s Catholic or not? If you can’t find anything on this besides that he went to Catholic High School, then just leave it as is.
 * His brother is an Evangelical Christian, so I would assume that Austin is too, but I couldn't find anything to confirm. I would also assume that they went to Catholic because the neighborhood school wasn't as good – my Catholic K-8 school had a variety of religions represented because the families didn't trust the public schools in the area
 * Yeah, I've heard of people that weren't Catholic going to Catholic schools before because they liked the instruction better at them. If you can't find a source, then don't add anymore in. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:24, 13 September 2021 (UTC)

Further comments
And apparently I'd also forgotten to finish the review (must've been really absent-minded that week!), but just a few more comments.

Seattle Mariners

 * I’d take out the hyphen in minor-league, for consistency.
 * ”first base, which was left” – “first base, a position that had been left”
 * ”and scored his first” – “and recorded his first”
 * Mentioned this in Marlins section, but at bats instead of plate appearances if you’re referencing batting average.
 * ”batted .306, with” – No comma needed.
 * Mentioned this in Marlins section, but at bats instead of plate appearances if you’re referencing batting average.
 * ”batted .306, with” – No comma needed.
 * ”batted .306, with” – No comma needed.
 * ”batted .306, with” – No comma needed.

San Diego Padres

 * ”The trade was done as part” – “The trade was part”
 * ”moves from Padres” – “moves by Padres”
 * I know what bullpen game means, but might want to explain it more. There doesn’t seem to be an article about it, so could put “use several relief pitchers for the game, instead of having a regular starter pitch the first several innings.”
 * ✅ I added a note, with a reference to a WSJ article that explains the concept a little more
 * ”after the trade was finalized, and that he had continued playing through the injury” – “after the trade was finalized, but he had continued playing through the injury.”
 * I’d take out the part about the targeted return date, since he’s back now.
 * ”after the trade was finalized, and that he had continued playing through the injury” – “after the trade was finalized, but he had continued playing through the injury.”
 * I’d take out the part about the targeted return date, since he’s back now.
 * I’d take out the part about the targeted return date, since he’s back now.

Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 20:48, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
 * I think I hit everything! I almost pinged you asking about this, but then I had to go and mourn the fact that Vinny was DFA'd yesterday. He was weird and unpredictable and never very good, but dammit, he was a Philly staple. Also a rumor that your guys may or may not have been poking around at him, so who knows? He'll probably be a Cy Young guy next season! —  Ghost River  22:53, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good now! Sorry for my tardiness, and I'll try to make sure that doesn't happen again in the future! Passed. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:25, 13 September 2021 (UTC)