Talk:Avalanche United/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wetrorave (talk · contribs) 20:53, 18 June 2021 (UTC)

One more review for the day

Infobox

 * Add the city and country where Studio 159 is located, in accordance with style guidelines of T:Ia#studio
 * Use Singles template here

Lead

 * "I Am the Avalanche. I Surrender Records released the album on" > "I Am the Avalanche, released by I Surrender Records on"
 * "self-titled debut album" > "eponymous debut album"
 * "activity by the band slowed." > "the band's activity slowed."
 * "spent several months between February and July 2011 recording their next album" > "recorded Avalanche United between February and July 2011"
 * "features material written by Caruana and guitarist Mike Ireland." > "also features material written guitarist Mike Ireland." - since it was already mentioned that "Vocalist Vinnie Caruana went through a divorce and subsequently wrote an abundance of material.", there is no need to repeat it

Background and production

 * Retitle to Background and recording
 * again, "self-titled debut album" > "eponymous debut album"
 * "they were out of the public eye for some time, the band" > "the band was of the public eye for some time, they"
 * "Vocalist, Vinnie" > "Vocalist Vinnie"
 * Change "Seattle, Washington" to simply "Seattle" and wikilink to Seattle
 * Wikilink New York City to New York City
 * "The producer, Machine," > "American musician Machine" since Brett Romnes was the producer
 * Wikilink mastered at "Douches mastered the album" to mastering (audio)

Composition and lyrics

 * "has been described as" > "explores"
 * "melodic hardcore,undefined and punk rock.undefined" > "melodic hardcore and punk rock.undefinedundefined"
 * "Caruana said: "[Avalanche United] stands" > "Caruana said that it "stands"
 * "is about dying young." - try to expand on this sentence: how exactly do the lyrics portray "dying young"?

Release

 * Good

Reception

 * "added, the music" > "added that the music"
 * "Blare included the album on their top 50 albums of the year list." > ""Blare ranked Avalanche United as the 42th best album on their top 50 albums of the year list."

Track listing

 * Good

Personnel

 * Good

Conclusion
until issues are fixedI may not be able to respond in the following days, but I swear I'll be here on Monday
 * Made the changes. Yeepsi (talk) 07:54, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
 * I've been able to come back here on Sunday anyways, so here goes the GA. ✅. Wetrorave (talk) 02:31, 21 June 2021 (UTC)