Talk:Avar–Byzantine wars/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 10:32, 12 March 2018 (UTC)

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Discussion
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 * Ref 24, Curta, is not linked.
 * Only 1 of your 13 sources has publisher location. (For information only, not a fail issue at B class.)
 * Only 1 of your 13 sources has publisher location. (For information only, not a fail issue at B class.)

Prose (most of these are just suggestions): Infobox:
 * "...while the Persians and Avars siege Constantinople in 626." Should be "besiege" (or "lay siege to") - first caption.
 * "conflicts were first initiated in 568". Initiated implies first.
 * "The Avars usually raided the Balkans when the Byzantine Empire was distracted elsewhere, usually in its frequent wars with the Sassanid Empire in the East." Replace the second "usually" with "typically"? Or the first.
 * "but allegedly sent 10,000 sent Kotrigur Huns"
 * "and a further eight of nine cities in 586." This doesn't really make sense. Which 9 cities?
 * The source doesn't mention the names, unfortunately, just that 9 were sieged and 8 (of the nine) were captured. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  20:05, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
 * "The next year, in 602, the Antes began to invade the Avars" I am not sure that one can invade a people. "invade the Avars' lands" perhaps?
 * "Byzantine naval superiority also made communication between the two forces more difficult." I am not sure that "more is necessary.
 * "which remained until their conquest by Charlemagne." It would be helpful to give a date for this event. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:43, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
 * The source doesn't mention the names, unfortunately, just that 9 were sieged and 8 (of the nine) were captured. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  20:05, 13 March 2018 (UTC)
 * "The next year, in 602, the Antes began to invade the Avars" I am not sure that one can invade a people. "invade the Avars' lands" perhaps?
 * "Byzantine naval superiority also made communication between the two forces more difficult." I am not sure that "more is necessary.
 * "which remained until their conquest by Charlemagne." It would be helpful to give a date for this event. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:43, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
 * "which remained until their conquest by Charlemagne." It would be helpful to give a date for this event. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:43, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
 * "which remained until their conquest by Charlemagne." It would be helpful to give a date for this event. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:43, 12 March 2018 (UTC)
 * "Territorial changes: Balkans annexed by Avars, continually recaptured until final Avar possession ." This doesn't match too well with the last section of the article. I can't actually think of a better way to phrase things, but I flag it up in case you can. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:31, 12 March 2018 (UTC)


 * I believe I have addressed all of your suggestions. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  20:05, 13 March 2018 (UTC)