Talk:Avenue Range Station massacre/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Adityavagarwal (talk · contribs) 10:56, 24 October 2017 (UTC)

I am happy to pick it up for a review! Making straight-forward changes as I go, so please feel very free to revert any mistake I commit! Adityavagarwal (talk) 10:56, 24 October 2017 (UTC)
 * "In May of that year" how about "In May that year"?


 * You could mention James's brother's name in full: Archibald Brown.


 * "was hanged in 1847" are we also able to find the month there?


 * "pioneer" It looks slightly puffy, and the word can be removed altogether. Although, it is about a part of a country, so I do not think it should be a problem to have the word and, furthermore, it really is amazing to know about the fact that only one such sentence had ever been given!


 * "was sent to the area to investigate, arriving on 19 February" can it be reworded?


 * "Massacre, investigation and legal proceedings" the heading should have a comma before "and", to be consistent with Oxford commas used throughout the article!


 * "Adelaide on 11 June" you should add the year here.


 * "In July, the South" the year should be mentioned here too!


 * Do we also know the month Brown died in?

A really well-written article. I guess that is all I have to nitpick on! Adityavagarwal (talk) 11:20, 24 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks, . All done, except for Archibald Brown, which I think would be unnecessary, and the month of the hanging, which I don't have to hand. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 23:22, 24 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Added month of hanging, as well as source and location of murder (also in the south east of the colony). Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:23, 25 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Looks great! Apologies for the delay. Had a really busy day yesterday. I would in fact love it to go to FAC too! :D Well done! Adityavagarwal (talk) 07:03, 26 October 2017 (UTC)
 * No worries. I'll push it through Milhist A-Class review before putting it up for FAC. Thanks again, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 07:21, 26 October 2017 (UTC)


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