Talk:Ayu Tsukimiya/GA1

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Hello. I'll be doing the GA review for this article. Here's some suggestions for improvement: The article will be on hold for seven days to allow for improvements. Nikki 311  02:04, 24 June 2008 (UTC)
 * All the paragraphs in the lead begin with "Ayu". Can it be mixed up a bit?✅
 * Image:Ayu Tsukimiya Key.jpg is not low resolution, but is marked as such.✅ (resized to 230px width)
 * "In the anime adaptation of Air, another of Key's visual novels, Ayu makes a cameo appearance in episode two along with Nayuki Minase and Makoto Sawatari as regular girls who talk to Yukito Kunisaki about where Kano Kirishima is." - sentences are not supposed to end with prepositions, so this needs to be reworded somehow✅
 * Can more be said about the character's reception by fans and critics? It is needed as part of the breadth requirement for GAs.
 * The first three are done. As for the fourth point, I have attempted to look for reliable reviews of the character, but have found very little. Oh, wait a second, I just remembered that I may be able to get something from a Newtype USA issue I have which had a piece on Kanon. But other than that, I'm pretty much at a loss.--  十  八  04:01, 24 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Let me know if you find anything in the magazine. There aren't critics for this type of thing? Nikki  311  21:53, 26 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Critics? For video game (nay, visual novel) characters? Not that I know of.--  十  八  22:08, 26 June 2008 (UTC)

Okay, the Newtype USA reference has been added, even though it's not much.--  十  八  22:39, 27 June 2008 (UTC)
 * Not much is always better than nothing at all. I'll pass the article. Nikki  311  01:06, 28 June 2008 (UTC)