Talk:B'Day Anthology Video Album/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CallMe Nathan   &bull;  Talk2Me   20:40, 31 May 2011 (UTC)

Lead

 * exlusively -> typo
 * exlusively at -> through
 * Knowles shot nine videos for the album, with four other videos having already been filmed. -> a bit repetitive
 * has been awarded -> its not really an award, its a certification of authenticity for said amount of shipments
 * denoting?
 * Outside of North America, -> seems a bit biased and too focused on the US, perhaps "internationally"
 * That gives the impression that it was worldwide ie everywhere including North America Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)


 * the album featured as a bonus disc
 * Half-thought? :P Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Lol, maybe "the album was featured as a bonus disc" :P-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   00:02, 6 June 2011 (UTC)


 * The "Still in Love (Kissing You)" video featured a cover of a song by Des'ree and, due to a lawsuit, only initial pressings of the album contain its video. -> a bit lost here

Background

 * Knowles said that she filmed B'Day Anthology Video Album -> she didn't film it, she compiled it. They were already filmed for other purposes
 * Only four videos were already filmed, the other nine were filmed especially for the album


 * do not have to log on to YouTube to watch her music videos, but instead can play them via DVD -> would not. Also, could be worded better
 * This section could benefit from a basic c/e. The sentencing is a bit choppy
 * According to Vibe, the shooting of the thirteen videos included on the album means that Knowles holds the record of the most music videos released in a twelve-month period. -> bad sentence

Release

 * Released, released. -> try to avoid repetitive wording in the same sentence
 * Again
 * The video album featured as the second disc on international copies of B'Day Deluxe Edition albeit without the behind-the-scenes,[9] while Irremplazable was the bonus disc in the United States. -> multiple issues. Aside from the poor wording, this is the first time I have read here about Irremplazable. It needs some form of introduction
 * Prior to its release, copies of the videos were ripped from an advance album and leaked onto the internet in MP4 form.[11] promoted the album by appearing on television shows -> fix
 * Any sources for the appearances?
 * At the end of the sentence


 * marking shipments of two million copies. -> Ummmm, don't you mean 200,000
 * Oops, I thought that figure was surprisingly high. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)


 * Marking doesn't really fit here

Lawsuit

 * Main article: Kissing You (Des'ree song)#Lawsuit -> fix
 * What's wrong with it? Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)
 * Usually we don't have it like that. If I link the MC version of "I'll Be There", I won't have it come up with the asterisk.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   00:05, 6 June 2011 (UTC)


 * a video for the song to include on -> the tense is weird.

Misc

 * Any positions for a video chart in the US?
 * No, I could only find three relevant Billboard issues on Google Books, but I'll ask Legolas to do a search. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:06, 5 June 2011 (UTC)


 * As per usual, you got seven days :)-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   11:36, 5 June 2011 (UTC)


 * Good job! Passing.-- CallMe Nathan  &bull;  Talk2Me   01:38, 10 June 2011 (UTC)