Talk:BL 18-inch Mk I naval gun/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Skinny87 (talk) 08:12, 5 October 2010 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Was there any particular reason why Fisher wanted a larger calibre weapon? Were there fears that the previous size wouldn't do enough damage, or penetrate sufficient armour?
 * It's not entirely clear. Possibly the former, but he definitely seems to have had an exaggerated idea of what the gun could do.
 * 'It was mounted in a single-gun turret, also designated as the 15-inch B, derived from the twin-gun 15-inch Mark I/N turret and the barbettes of Furious were designed to accommodate either turret in case problems arose with the 18-inch gun's development.' - Does this mean the barbettes (could do with a wikilink by the way) were enlarged to accomodate both styles of turrets in case the gun design was larger than anticipated? This is slightly confusing.
 * Linked; broke the sentence up so that it's hopefully a bit clearer.
 * 'The guns proved to be too much for Furious' light hull and they became available for other uses during 1917' - What, were they too heavy or too large?
 * Poweful.
 * 'He planned to transport the guns across the English Channel lashed to the bulges of monitors. ' - What are 'bulges', can they be wikilinked?
 * Anti-torpedo bulges, linked.
 * 'He also thought that they could be used on the decks of monitors so that a dual purpose carriage was designed for the guns' - 'and as such' instead of 'so that'
 * Done
 * 'Ammunition handling, elevation and ramming were to be done via hydraulic pump, but the breech was hand-worked' - To make the paragraph flow more logically, I think it would be best to have this sentence moved to just after 'The original concept for land use involved a special elevating slide that could traverse 6° to either side'.
 * Agreed.
 * 'The guns proved to be too much for Furious' light hull and they became available for other uses during 1917' - This concept is first introduced here, but the explanation as to why comes later; I would move the explanation to here, otherwise the reader has to go through the rest of the article to find it.
 * 'A total of 85 18-inch shells were fired in action' - I would make it clear that this was from both active guns, as it makes it seem as if this was achieved by the second somehow.
 * Done.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Good little article, a little tweak here and there and it'll be passed. Skinny87 (talk) 08:24, 5 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 19:07, 5 October 2010 (UTC)