Talk:Babur/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 08:41, 9 June 2015 (UTC)

Hello, I'm Calvin999 and I am reviewing this article.


 * Review
 * Some dab links
 * Judging by the popularity of Babur, it is not useful to put such links here, so I have removed them.


 * Multiple dead links
 * ✅ RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 09:13, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Info box, shouldn't it be Spouse(s) ?
 * Suleiman the Magnificient has consort, so I have edited the same here.


 * Info box, why are there two dynasties listed?
 * He was a descendent of Timur and hence Timurid dynasty and founder of Mughal. So edited it now.


 * Info box, you've linked Uzbekistan but not India?


 * Info box, don't need a comma after Islam


 * Lead: Aren't names usually written in their original language too? (Like in the Etymology section)


 * of Timur, from → Remove comma


 * Culturally, he was greatly influenced by the Persian culture → Repetition of culture


 * He was the eldest son of Umar Sheikh Mirza, through whom he has his ancestral roots to Timur. → You're using past and present tenses here


 * Final two paragraphs of lead could be merged as one. No need for 5 paragraphs nor two which are so short to be separate.


 * He was born as → Babur was born as


 * According to Stephen Frederic Dale, → Who is he?


 * W.M. Thackston argues → And who is he?


 * Babur wrote his memoirs and these form the main source for details of his life. → I'd rephrase the start of the sentence.


 * Shouldn't some info such as his birthplace etc be in the Etymology section instead of Background? I feel like it all belongs together.
 * Actually the Islamic kings used to have many wives and children, most of whom we dont have track of. Moreover Umar Shaikh Mirza was not a big ruler.


 * I'd move the family tree photo to the right, because the structure of images usually goes left, right, left or right, left, right.
 * in a freak accident. → What happened?


 * The Safavids however, refused → Comma after Safavids


 * The block quotes in the First battle of Panipat section shouldn't have quotation marks because they are already indented.


 * Merge the single sentence paragraph in with the other paragraph in the Battle of Khanwa section. I don't see the point of having a stray sentence.


 * when he got it translated. → when he had it translated.


 * towards Aisha Sultan Begum later losing → comma after Begum

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria
 * Summary


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

On hold for 7 days. — Calvin999 18:36, 10 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Outcome


 * , Edited the article as per as suggestions. RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 10:17, 12 June 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks. — Calvin999  10:20, 12 June 2015 (UTC)


 * Outcome
 * Pass or Fail: