Talk:Bag End/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Premeditated Chaos (talk · contribs) 08:11, 3 January 2023 (UTC)

I habitually take about a week or so to get to GA reviews. If I let it get longer than that, ping me. &spades;PMC&spades; (talk) 08:11, 3 January 2023 (UTC)


 * Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:39, 3 January 2023 (UTC)


 * "in its detail an account of character" - not sure this is super clear.
 * Edited.
 * I tweaked it to "expression" rather than account, hope that's ok.


 * Bit of sandwiching with Tolkien's painting and the drawing of the Bag End front hall, which looks especially awkward with the block quote between them.
 * Fixed.


 * I'm not sure the detail about the note from Thorin is super germane to the topic of Bag End
 * Removed.


 * You've got section hatnotes for Architecture in Middle-earth twice in the article, just one in an article of this length is enough I think
 * Fixed.


 * something that he calls "a silly phrase... a piece of "French-oriented snobbery" I think you're missing a set of end quotation marks
 * Fixed.


 * For the outside/unfamiliar reader, it's not clear where the Lobelia-Vita connection comes from, so the section perhaps doesn't have the impact it should. Can we maybe have a bit of context for why Tolkien would have been poking fun at Vita? Did he know her?
 * Added a bit more about the Lobelia-Vita connection. One could go on for pages on this topic, and photos would be nice, but we're in some danger of WP:COATRACK. Hope this is now enough to be clear, it's a juicy topic.
 * Hah! Tolkien's satire of Vita Sackville-West as a possible next project?


 * Honegger points up - "points out" maybe? Not sure I've ever heard "points up" used this way
 * Done.

Pretty minimal griping. I'm open to discussion on any points from above that you disagree with. Sources good, no POV or CV, in-universe stuff is described with appropriate encyclopedic distance. &spades;PMC&spades; (talk) 09:13, 9 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Many thanks. Chiswick Chap (talk) 10:17, 9 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Looks good! Easy pass :) &spades;PMC&spades; (talk) 10:29, 9 January 2023 (UTC)