Talk:Baiken/GA1

GA Review
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Nominator: 18:33, 19 February 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 23:25, 6 April 2024 (UTC)

Will hit up this review soon. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 23:25, 6 April 2024 (UTC)

Apologies for the delay, let's get rolling. @

GA Criteria
1. Article is well-written.

2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.

3. Broad in coverage. Covers multiple aspects of the subject.

4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.

5. Article appears stable. No notable instances of vandalism I can see.

6. Both images have proper fair use rationales.

Lead
-"Players of the series have stated they would not buy a Guilty Gear title that did not have her included." Feel this bit is unnecessary and a bit unclear. Which players? Are these random players reputable?

-I'd choose a more descriptive word than swagger since that's a bit unclear.

-Specify that the sex appeal is about Baiken since the wording is unclear.

Conception and Design
-What is the cataclysm?
 * Replaced with a description of the Gears and role/presence in the storyline.

Appearances
-What are Asami and Kosou in terms of attacks? -Adding on to the cataclysm comment, could you elaborate on what Gears are? It's unclear.
 * Reworded this sentence to make it clear these are the actual parrying moves
 * Should be fixed with the above Cataclysm fix.

Promotion and Reception
-" in how the primary focus was on her sword arm, with the mechanic prosthesis integrated into her missing arm were secondary, but still allowed for integration into more elaborate combination attacks in the games." I'd separate this from the prior sentence half and reword for clarity since it's a run-on and the grammar's off here. -I'd cut the "Meanwhile," in the last sentence of the second paragraph. -What does the thesis state about Baiken? Less so thinking it's problematic and more that I just want to verify the info in there. -"He questioned just how much larger Arc System Works planned to make them, though appreciated the discourse they brought regarding the character." More of a nitpick, but I feel this could be reworded, since as it stands it doesn't really feel like critical commentary.
 * Rewrote to try and be clearer.
 * Fixed
 * Added information from the thesis to flesh this out.
 * Reworded.

Overall
-Overall well-written and well done. Patch up the above and I'd be happy to pass this article. If you have any questions, let me know. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 22:21, 9 April 2024 (UTC)
 * I think I got everything, lemme know if there's anything else to fix!--Kung Fu Man (talk) 04:43, 10 April 2024 (UTC)
 * Should be all good! I'm happy to pass this article. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 17:01, 10 April 2024 (UTC)