Talk:Bailey Dale/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

I'll be taking at this! —  Ghost River  22:13, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

 * Birth date requires a citation, either in the lede or with a sentence about it in the "Early life" head
 * ✅ - Is putting the reference in the infobox ok? Doggo375 (talk) 01:09, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Height and weight should also be referenced
 * ✅ - put height and weight citations in infobox as well. Doggo375 (talk) 01:09, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * In the infobox, space between "2014 National Draft" and "Western Bulldogs"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 01:10, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Include link to Half-back line for "running half-back"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 01:15, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "Dale was selected by the Western Bulldogs" "Thte Western Bulldogs took Dale"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 01:15, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "2 Brownlow Medal votes" "two Brownlow Medal votes" per MOS:NUMERAL
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 01:15, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

Early life & career

 * Ampersand to "and" in the header
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 06:43, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Link "Collingwood" to Collingwood Football Club
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 06:43, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Spell out and link "Australian Football League" in the first instance in the body
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 06:43, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Thte sentence beginning "He played in the Victorian Under 12 schoolboys" is very long and can probably be split into two, one about the junior team and one about the senior
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 06:43, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "kicking 3 goals" "kicking three goals" per MOS:NUMERAL
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 06:43, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "kicked 2 more goals" "kicked two more goals" per MOS:NUMERAL
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 06:43, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Specify in prose that he was taken in the 2014 AFL draft, with the associated link
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 06:43, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

2015-2017: Early years

 * Spell out and link VFL
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Delink "Collingwood" here, as it should be linked above
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * 'fairytale' "fairytale" per MOS:DOUBLE
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Use the conversion template for "eight kilograms"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "he had a good start" "He had a good start"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Remove the fixed image size from the photo in this section, per MOS:IMGSIZE
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "kicking 7 goals" "kicking seven goals"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "kicking 2 goals" "kicking two goals"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "kicking 4 goals" "kicking four goals"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * in an inspired performance POV
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Italicize The Age as the name of a publication
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:25, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

2018-2020: form struggles

 * Include some context for who Chris Judd is in the quotebox
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:39, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "form struggles" "Form struggles"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:40, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "Dale, playing just" "Dale, who played just"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:37, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "1 goal game" "one-goal game"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:37, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * No comma after "to open the season"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:37, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "kicking 2 goals" "kicking two goals"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:37, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "Navicular bone" "navicular bone"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:40, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Some concrete dates, not just rounds, around the foot injury would be helpful
 * ✅ - Specified that the injury was suffered in late May. Doggo375 (talk) 23:50, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * No comma after "breakout 2019 season"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:50, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Link "2019 season" to 2019 AFL season
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:50, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "4 disposal game" "four-disposal game"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:50, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "5 goal performance with 4 goals" "five-goal performance with four goals"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:50, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Continue all the way down replacing sub-10 numerals with the written word
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:50, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "three year contract extension" "three-year contract extension"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:52, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "only playing 9 games" "who played only nine games"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:52, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "2 goals from 2 games" "two goals from two games"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:52, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

2021-: Switch to defence

 * Make this "2021-present" in the subhead
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 22:40, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "for Dale, going" "for Dale, who went"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * No comma after "early in the pre-season"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "19.1%" "19.1 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * Delink St Kilda, already linked above
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "disposals (a career record)" "disposals, the latter a career record"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)


 * "By this point in the season, Dale's inclusion in the 2021 All-Australian team was being brought up as a possibility, such was his form across the half-back line." "His form across the half-back line impressed enough that some began suggesting Dale's inclusion in the 2021 All-Australian team"
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 23:32, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

Statistics

 * Citation needed for the pandemic-shortened season note
 * ✅ Doggo375 (talk) 01:00, 14 November 2021 (UTC)

General comments

 * Images are properly licensed and relevant
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Copyvio score looks good

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. —  Ghost River  22:39, 13 November 2021 (UTC)
 * Thanks very much for taking on this review! I will get to finishing this review over the next day or two. Doggo375 (talk) 00:50, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
 * I've finished up rectifying all the issues pointed out! Let me know if there is anything else to be done! Thanks again for reviewing this article, your review was quick, clear and concise. Doggo375 (talk) 23:55, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
 * I moved the ref in the infobox to the lede, and otherwise I think this one is good to go! Good job! —  Ghost River  18:59, 15 November 2021 (UTC)