Talk:Balladen om killen/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:08, 13 January 2023 (UTC)

I will get on with this right away! --K. Peake 08:08, 13 January 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Change the genre in the infobox to only rock since hard rock is not sourced and ballad does not count
 * Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
 * Remove the release year of "Like a Rolling Stone" because it is not notable for the lead
 * It is not sourced that the girls are actually invited to an apartment
 * Remove pipe on A-side per MOS:LINKSTYLE
 * "the single was due to" → ""Balladen om Killen" was due to"
 * "role in the production of the single," → "role in the production of the song,"
 * "attribute to its'" → "attribute to its"
 * "Nonetheless, it garnered positive reviews" → "Nonetheless, the song garnered positive reviews"

Background

 * Pipe rock to Rock music
 * "and the band had changed" → "They had also changed" starting a new sentence
 * "both guitarists of the group, Danne Larsson and" → "the guitarists Danne Larsson and"
 * "the band's bassist Göran Lagerberg," → "bassist Göran Lagerberg,"

Recording and composition

 * "with Lagerberg himself" → "with the bassist himself"
 * "their respective instruments, drums and" → "their respective instruments of drums and"
 * Quote box looks good!
 * Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
 * "According to Göran Brandels and" → "according to Göran Brandels and"
 * "does sing lead on" → "does sing lead vocals on"
 * "Despite this" specify what since this is a new para
 * "in which Lagerberg's bandmate Tommy Blom was" → "in which Blom was"
 * "which included being cocky" → "such as being cocky"
 * "of Lagerberg, and who's" → "of Lagerberg and his"
 * Invoke the ref after the fifty years ago quote because they need to be after any direct quotations
 * "were putting out at the same time." → "were putting out then."

Release and commercial performance

 * "releases, which both have different picture sleeves were" → "releases both have different picture sleeves and were"
 * "would not known who Örjan Ramberg was," → "would not have known who Ramberg was," and if this is a problem, write Örjan instead of first name
 * "though notes that the" → "though notes the"
 * "likely assumed that the image of Ramberg" → "likely assumed how the image of him"
 * "of just number 13," → "of only number 13,"
 * "It was additionally the only week it appeared" → "This was additionally the only week the song appeared"
 * "it also failed to" → "the song also failed to"
 * "even though it was never released in his name." → "despite never being released in his name. ", as this is missing the space after the full-stop
 * Shouldn't a colon be used instead of semi-colon?
 * "and partly due to" → "and also due to" to be less repetitive
 * Wikilink bonus tracks per MOS:LINK2SECT

Reception and legacy

 * The img's abandoned part is not sourced
 * "the single received primarily positive reviews," → "the single was met with primarily positive reviews,"
 * "the subject matter, and that the inclusion" → "the subject matter and the inclusion"
 * "though they end by noting that" → "though the staff writer ends by noting how"
 * Add a writer or the staff of for Aftonbladet and Svenska Dagbladet
 * "though write that the song is" → "though write it is"
 * "that gives the single a" → "giving the single a"
 * Add a full-stop after rock and roll
 * Avoid the word claim per WP:CLAIM
 * "in Swedish,[33] the release of" → "in Swedish;[33] the release of"
 * "as "Balladen om killen" was" → "as "Balladen om killen", was"
 * "and that they both should be" → "and thinks they both should be"
 * "under his name solo." → "under Ramberg's name solo."
 * "such as Siw Malmkvist, and Martin Ljung," → "such as Siw Malmkvist and Martin Ljung,"
 * "Although it was only moderately commercially successful, it" → "Despite only being moderately commercially successful, the song"
 * "were once again brought into" → "was once again brought into"

Personnel

 * Good

Charts

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; this went smoothly! --K. Peake 10:08, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Solved listed issues with a few exceptions:
 * Staff writers in the reviews formatted after "Mother's Little Helper", which is a GA and feature these citations:
 * "under his name solo." → "under Ramberg's name solo." → replaced it with a sentence instead: "Following the release of the single,[29] Ramberg chose to pursue a career as an actor, with "Balladen om killen" remaining as his only solo release"[13], with an added citation
 * Premium and Premium Publishing are the same publisher, just forgot to add the suffix to one of the sources. Should be solved now
 * The pages for the Hymn source refers to the physical copy of the article.
 * Hopefully all issues should be corrected now. VirreFriberg (talk) 23:12, 13 January 2023 (UTC)
 * I don't agree with your response to the staff writers part since that is a WP:OTHERSTUFFEXISTS argument, also why have you kept hard rock as the genre when it is not sourced? --K. Peake 09:38, 14 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Removed mention of staff writers in the sources and changed genre to simply Rock music as hard rock was indeed unsourced. VirreFriberg (talk) 12:31, 14 January 2023 (UTC)
 * No, what I meant is that you should use the staff or a writer of those publications, or something similar. --K. Peake 08:51, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
 * The articles themselves have no named author, but at the same time you stated "Remove staff author from refs 29, 30, 31 and 32" so I'm a bit lost. VirreFriberg (talk) 12:49, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
 * I meant the part you mentioned above for the references themselves; in prose, you need to write "the staff" or "a writer" of the publications said something because it makes no sense to write it as the opinion of a publication. --K. Peake 14:54, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Sorry, my mistake. Should be fixed now VirreFriberg (talk) 16:12, 15 January 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, we finally found a resolution to the problem! --K. Peake 11:16, 16 January 2023 (UTC)