Talk:Bang (Nicole Scherzinger song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:42, 20 April 2021 (UTC)

After our previous discussion about this article, it is only appropriate for me to review and I did take my time since your GAN of B7 has been on hold for a few days. --K. Peake 12:42, 20 April 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * The title has been incorrectly listed as "On the Rocks", so change to "Bang"


 * Only Setai Recording should be listed in the infobox, as that was the only studio for the role of recording
 * I have always listed all of the recording studios involved in the production of the song. I appreciate that Setai was where the song was recorded, but Contra and Mastering Palace are also recording studios, and mastering and engineering are part of the song production process. This is the case for many other GAs too/


 * Speech marks should not be around names in the producer parameter, plus is Christopher credited as Tricky Stewart or merely Stewart on the album itself?


 * Retitle the header to Music video and change "Bang" music video to merely "Bang"


 * Add a comma after second studio album


 * "It was written by" → "The song was written by"


 * "production by Tricky Stewart, The-Dream and" → "production from Stewart, The-Dream, and" because no matter what he is credited as on the album, surnames should be used on second mentions in prose and regarding the talk page discussion, I believe you should be using American English in this article due to Scherzinger's nationality (I am English myself btw)


 * ""Bang" was released as the fourth single from Big Fat Lie" → "It was released as the fourth single from the album" with the pipe


 * Add a full stop at the end of the above sentence


 * Actual reception was mixed if you look at the reviews listed, so change to that and also add about what was criticized


 * "music video directed by Anders Rostad was also praised" → "music video, directed by Anders Rostad, was praised" but add info about the synopsis of the video first and I recommend splitting the reception for the music video into a different sentence


 * Remove the part about it not charting on the UK Singles Chart since this is not notable unless a source specifically states the fact, also it can lead to all sorts of trivial listings for artists' songs not charting if this logic is consistent

Background and composition

 * "rumors in the media suggested that Nicole Scherzinger had" → "online rumors suggested that Scherzinger had"


 * "Scherzinger refuted those" → "A representative for Scherzinger refuted those"


 * Change January 2014 to February 2014 per the source


 * Remove comma before RCA Records


 * Remove wikilink on Big Fat Lie and the comma afterwards
 * , left wikilink on Big Fat Lie as its the first mention in this para.


 * Identify Nash as Terius "The-Dream" Nash


 * "provided all the sequencing for the song." → "provided all of the sequencing."


 * ""Bang" is an" → "Musically, "Bang" is an"


 * "song set to a" → "song, set to a"


 * The comp is lacking quite a bit; mention the vocals being hoarse per the Daily Mirror and can't you add more info from album reviews?
 * I'd love to add more but there just isn't the information available to support any further commentary. ≫  Lil- Unique1  -{ Talk  }- 20:16, 28 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Mixing and mastering sentence should be directly after the engineering info instead to organize the technical stuff properly


 * "It was mixed" → "The song was mixed" with the pipe


 * "in California at Contra Recordings." → "at Contra Recordings in California."

Release and reception

 * Pipe singles to Single (music)


 * Add a comma after "Run"


 * Pipe streaming to Streaming media


 * Add a comma after Daily Mirror


 * Czech website introduction is not needed for Musicserver.net


 * "going on criticize the song as" → "going on criticize the "sleazy" song as" per the source


 * "saying "[its] bland" → "saying "[it is] bland"


 * Remove the UK Singles Chart mention per my earlier comment, plus merge the third para with the second one


 * Remove similarly part at the start of the second sentence, though this can stay since the source directly mentions the song


 * "had charted on" → "had an entry on"

Music video

 * Remove "for "Bang"" in the accompanying music video sentence


 * "of choreography with a" → "of choreography that involve her and a"


 * [13][14] order should be switched per the prose order


 * "when Scherzinger "appeared alongside" → "when Scherzinger appeared "alongside" per the source
 * (I think)


 * "to the floor"." → "to the floor" on Stewart and The-Dream." per the source, not adding the quote to avoid using the former's full name
 * you've confused me with this comment tbh


 * It is sourced that there are a few flashing lights, not that these are sparse so reword accordingly


 * "The tone and mood of the video was" → "The mood of the video was" since this is solely what the terms seem to refer to


 * Remove or replace Daily Express per WP:RSP


 * "from Video Static also noted that the video swapped" → "from VideoStatic noted that the video abandons"


 * "Similarly the Daily Mirror's Fay Strang also called the video" → "Similarly, Strang called the music video"
 * , this is the first mention of Strang in this paragraph


 * Remove "in the video for "Bang"" before the comma, as it is obvious the reviewer is referring to her presence in it


 * "she said: "the video" → "she said: "The video" per the source's capitalization


 * "her killer body"." → "her killer body."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences


 * "Not all reviews were positive" → "However, not all reviews were positive."


 * "Jaromír Koc, writing for Czech website Music Server, went as" → "Koc went as"
 * , first mention in this paragraph


 * "criticizing the video as" → "criticizing the visual as"


 * "In Koc's opinion it" → "In Koc's opinion, the music video"

Credits and personnel

 * Video Static → VideoStatic


 * Recording location → Recording


 * Add the mastering location under the above header


 * The personnel does not appear to have a specific order; it is not alphabetical nor are the roles ordered in a certain way
 * , its in alphabetical order according to surname?
 * Oh sorry, I must have not noticed that due to focusing on alphabetical order for forenames. --K. Peake 06:44, 1 May 2021 (UTC)

Release history

 * Release history for "Bang" → Releases dates and formats for "Bang"


 * Format → Format(s)


 * Use Ref. for the ref col


 * Various is not backed up by two citations that are both to the US market
 * This is a tricky one. It was released - as evidenced by all the coverage from the likes of Digital Spy. However, it was one of those impact date releases where it was promoted to specific date without a separate digital download listing. In the UK, the video was released a day after the song was "released" for download. A separate listing was only produced for the US because at the time, the album had not been released. Not sure what to do with this to be honest. It's been more than seven years and the quality of sources/referencing available is not great. ≫  Lil- Unique1  -{ Talk  }- 22:28, 30 April 2021 (UTC)


 * Pipe streaming to Streaming media

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; there is quite a few but the article's not large so it shouldn't take long! --K. Peake 07:17, 21 April 2021 (UTC)
 * still not feeling amazing so will try and address this weekend. ≫  Lil- Unique1  -{ Talk  }- 22:29, 23 April 2021 (UTC)
 * No problem, glad that you've already started to address my comments though! --K. Peake 06:24, 24 April 2021 (UTC)
 * Apologies for the extended break with this one, as per my talkpage, I've been taking it slow. I think I've addressed or left comments for all of your suggestions. ≫  Lil- Unique1  -{ Talk  }- 22:30, 30 April 2021 (UTC)
 * It is acceptable and this looks a lot better, though you should swap the order of the reception and synopsis info for the video in the lead. Furthermore, change various to the United States and only use the forenames in the music video section because those are not the first mentions of the people within the relatively short article. --K. Peake 06:44, 1 May 2021 (UTC)
 * , addressed those changes. Appreciate the patience. ≫  Lil- Unique1  -{ Talk  }- 23:04, 1 May 2021 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, after I made some fixes to the music video info in the lead. You did misinterpret my comment about synopsis and reception; just know for future reference that I wouldn't have put "for the music video" directly after both if I wanted it to be ordered how you did before my c/e. --K. Peake 07:51, 2 May 2021 (UTC)