Talk:Banksia aquilonia/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sasata (talk · contribs) 19:44, 13 November 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this. Comments in a few days. Sasata (talk) 19:44, 13 November 2012 (UTC)
 * ok Casliber (talk · contribs) 20:03, 13 November 2012 (UTC)


 * lead: link Queensland, monograph, variety, bushfire
 * linked Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:46, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * lead's a bit short; how about a couple more sentence about what it looks like?
 * enlarged a bit - difficult to figure out how big to make it.... Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:13, 21 November 2012 (UTC)


 * "Distributed broadly," in Australia? Queensland? Doesn't look broadly distributed from the range map below!
 * not sure how that got there....removed Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:46, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * inconsistent use of endash or "to" when describing measurement ranges
 * just made 'em all ndashes.... Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:46, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * "They measure 0.8 to 1.2 cm" not sure if "they" refers to old flowers, oval follicles, or the woody spike form the previous sentence
 * follicles. tweaked Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:46, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * "The obovate dark grey-brown to black seeds sandwiching a woody separator." obovate - jargon; grammar needs fixing
 * follicles.I've linked obovate and fixed the grammar Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:52, 21 November 2012 (UTC)


 * "distinctive enough for it to be considered a separate species to B. integrifolia." maybe "… considered a species distinct from B. integrifolia."
 * done Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:00, 21 November 2012 (UTC)


 * link morphology
 * linked Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:51, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * "with plants with normal" reword to avoid repetition
 * removed first "with" Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:00, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * link cladistic, taxonomy
 * linked Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:01, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * "Despite initially giving it varietal level" giving->assigning?
 * tweaked Casliber (talk · contribs) 10:51, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * did you ever get a definitive answer about not capitalizing incomplete sentence figure captions?
 * 99% sure we don't...no sentence..no caps. Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:00, 19 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Hmmm, if this is true, then 1000's of captions will have to be changed across the encyclopedia. Note that MOS:CAPTION states "Captions normally start with a capital letter.", and no exception is noted in this regard for non-sentence captions. I'm not worried about it for GAN, but consider changing your 99% surety level if you take this to FAC ;-) Sasata (talk) 05:37, 22 November 2012 (UTC)


 * "Trees it grows commonly with include" sounds a bit awkward
 * rejigged, but not so happy with alternative either.... Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:01, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * link understorey, Wet Tropics, acidic soil
 * linked Casliber (talk · contribs) 11:01, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * a similar species section is missing; is this species readily distinguishable from, for example, the other species in series Salicinae?
 * the last para of description has some differences with integrifolia. Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:43, 21 November 2012 (UTC)


 * why not include the length of the perianth from Zich & West 2010?
 * added Casliber (talk · contribs) 01:46, 22 November 2012 (UTC)


 * any chance of having pics of the crown, the bark, the white leaf undersurface, or a mature fruit?
 * will ask. These grow about 3000 km away from where I am.... Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:00, 19 November 2012 (UTC)
 * Looking more closely, I see that the "developing follicles" image shows the white leaf underside, so have stricken that. Sasata (talk) 05:37, 22 November 2012 (UTC)


 * make common name redirects?
 * apart from "northern banksia" all the other names are very general. Will make redirect for that one though Casliber (talk · contribs)


 * apparently the Aborigines called the plant jingana (see here) This same source mentions that the southernmost occurrence is at Proserpine.
 * no no, it mentions the northernmost occurrence of compar is at Proserpine. added other bit now 13:59, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * nothing useful in the following sources?
 * Title: Eastern Banksia of the B. integrifolia group.
 * Author(s): Blake, T.
 * Source: Australian Plants Volume: 13   Issue: 105   Pages: 200-207   Published: 1985
 * got this off my shelf - nothing in it which is not covered elsewhere Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:45, 19 November 2012 (UTC)


 * Title: The Banksia integrifolia L.f. species complex (Proteaceae)
 * Author(s): Thiele, Kevin ; Ladiges, Pauline Y.
 * Source: Australian Systematic Botany Volume: 7   Issue: 4   Pages: 393-408   DOI: 10.1071/SB9940393   Published: 1994
 * it is recapped more systematically in the 1996 analysis of the genus Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:43, 21 November 2012 (UTC)


 * to be consistent, you should give the annual rainfall in imperial units
 * added Casliber (talk · contribs) 01:46, 22 November 2012 (UTC)

Two final things:
 * "50 follicles each, each of which" reword to avoid repetition
 * one "each" removed...I think there is enough info that not ambiguous.... Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:49, 22 November 2012 (UTC)


 * there's a deadlink that should be fixed
 * url dead...sadly removed Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:49, 22 November 2012 (UTC)

Other than this (and the captions non cap issue), I'm confident that this meets the GA criteria. All images appropriately licensed; promoting now. Sasata (talk) 05:37, 22 November 2012 (UTC)