Talk:Banksia coccinea/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 23:00, 20 April 2014 (UTC)

Happy to offer a review. J Milburn (talk) 23:00, 20 April 2014 (UTC)


 * The last couple of lines of the lead feel repetitive- you mention humid summers twice, and it's the second time dieback has been mentioned.
 * folded in now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:17, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * "The stems have begun developing the previous spring and there is no visible evidence of flower spike development for around five months before the buds actually appear—the whole process taking 9-12 months in total." Odd tense- it's actually fairly jarring
 * Yes this is tricky - I have tried arranging it more chronologically - does that help? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:05, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * "of 286±24 individual flowers" Technical- could this be spelled out in any way?
 * changed to "around 286" - could also do "between 262 and 300", but think the range is so small the former is ok..? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:38, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * "Style" is a little jargony to be used without a definition/link, I feel. Same for "perianth", "pistil", "recurved" and "infructescence"- these make the article difficult for the uninitiated.
 * all linked now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:38, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Some metric lengths are converted, some aren't- I was wondering how you made the choice?
 * all should have them now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 08:06, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * "what is now the present-day" Redundancy
 * trimmed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:23, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * "He recorded 31 species of Banksia in his 1810 work Prodromus Florae Novae Hollandiae et Insulae Van Diemen, and in his taxonomic arrangement, placed the taxon in the" Difficult to read. Perhaps you could place a comma between "and" and "in", making "in his taxonomic arrangement" a parenthetical adverbial clause.
 * comma added Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 07:58, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Should "incertae sedis" be italicised? I suspect so. A link would also be good.
 * italicised and linked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:17, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * "Maguire" is the first person not referred to by full name (also Cardillo later)
 * Couldn't find her name - got 'em both and added now Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:45, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * Munglinup worth linking? Redlinks aren't a bad thing!
 * linked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:46, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * "97 %" Why the space?
 * human error. removed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:25, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * "The larvae moult and feed until January to March the larvae feed, when they reduce activity until early October" Something's gone wrong
 * human error. forgot to remove bit when shuffling. fixed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:43, 21 April 2014 (UTC)


 * "by Dr Margaret Sedgley of" Why "Dr"? Surely most of the people you cite will have doctorates.
 * removed Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 02:18, 21 April 2014 (UTC)

Sources all seem approriate- any formatting issues are too minor to worry about for GAC, though I think two columns would be more aesthetically pleasing. Pictures are all great, spotchecks reveal no problems. This definitely seems close to GA level.
 * 2 columns done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:48, 21 April 2014 (UTC)

Please double-check my edits! J Milburn (talk) 23:36, 20 April 2014 (UTC)
 * your changes are fine Cas Liber (talk · contribs)

02:19, 21 April 2014 (UTC)

Ok, I'm happy with your changes, so I'm going to go ahead and promote. Great work, as ever. J Milburn (talk) 10:23, 21 April 2014 (UTC)