Talk:Banksia menziesii/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sasata (talk) 05:36, 6 May 2010 (UTC)

Comments
 * lead could be a tad longer
 * done Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:43, 7 May 2010 (UTC)


 * do not know what an "amenities planting" is
 * it means public parks, nature strips and bits and pieces like that. Appears to be more of an Australian term. Will have a think about an alternative. Essentially what it means is nature strips and public parks, so I figured it was actually just easier to write that. Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:00, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * link/explain dieback in the lead
 * added " - from the soil-borne water mould Phytophthora cinnamomi Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:00, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * "climates of summer humidity" sounds slightly awkward to me
 * changed to "places with humid summers" Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:32, 7 May 2010 (UTC)


 * height given in description is greater than that in lead
 * forgot to change latter. done now. Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:17, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * "The leaf margins have serrated with many small" -> "are serrated" or missing a word
 * the former, and fixed Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:17, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * "recorded an average of 1043 per flower spike." should clarify "flower spike"
 * clarified in previous sentence that inflorescence = flower spike Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:17, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * "Old flowers usually fall off the spikes quickly, with up to 25 large beaked follicles following." Not sure what's being said here… do large beaked follicles also fall off soon after the old flowers, or they grow to replace the flowers that have fallen?
 * the big woody follicles develop on the spike as and after the flower parts fall off. They don't fall off. Changed "following" to "developing" - does that help? Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:35, 7 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Banksia is inconsistently capitalized in the common names
 * should always be lower case - I think I got 'em all... Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:17, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * what does "firewheel" mean in "Firewheel Banksia"?
 * I have never seen an explanation of its derivation. I wondered whether it was a misheard "firewood banksia" myself, or how when looked from above an immature inflorescence might look like the spokes of a fiery wheel (anyway, this is all pers. comm. and unable to be cited :)) Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:51, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * "and Sirmuellera menziesii (R.Br.) Kuntze" is now" wasn't sure how to fix the extra/missing quote/italic thing going on here
 * I just removed the final extra double-quote which seemed to be in error Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:51, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * can we link road verge to long acre (road verge)? same thing?
 * yes, done Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:21, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * "Published in 1988, a field study conducted in banksia woodland near Perth anthesis occurred on an inflorescence" missing word somewhere
 * "'Published in 1988, a field study conducted in banksia woodland near Perth noted that anthesis occurred on an inflorescence at an average rate of 40 to 60 florets opening per day'' - bold added. Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:31, 7 May 2010 (UTC)


 * epicormic buds?
 * linked to Epicormic shoot Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:03, 7 May 2010 (UTC)


 * How about rearranging/expanding to rid those two isolated sentences in Ecology?
 * both expanded Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:58, 7 May 2010 (UTC)


 * "Byron Lamont has observed that" who's this guy (i.e. do we need to know his name?)
 * I mentioned his name as I have not heard that statement to be generally true, thus I felt it important to highlight the report as his observation rather than globally accepted fact (I can't find a Reliable Source which explicitly says otherwise, but I know the dwarf form as it is widely sold in nurseries) Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:51, 6 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Fair enough... I also missed that his name was mentioned in the Curtin University study in the previous section. Sasata (talk) 14:27, 7 May 2010 (UTC)


 * "…high susceptibility to Phytophthora cinnamomi dieback,[33] it is unreliable in conditions with summer humidity or poor drainage." can we add something like "…, conditions which favour the growth of the soil-borne water mould."?
 * done Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:51, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * "An interesting feature" unencyclopedic
 * fluff removed Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:02, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * The caption in the cultivation section could be better (more descriptive)
 * okay, smoothed it out a little and embellished slightly. is this what you mean? Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:02, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * what's a "hard prune"? (I'm looking for a better adjective, unless that's commonly used in the field)
 * heavily pruned and added explanation. Could have said "pruned right back" too. Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:02, 6 May 2010 (UTC)


 * refs will need a copyedit before FAC wrt:
 * page range format (got the two non-two digit ones) Casliber (talk · contribs) 13:51, 6 May 2010 (UTC)
 * consistency with capitalization of article titles
 * format for author names; eg compare #6 with #13 - names separated by semicolon in one and "and" in the other; sometimes there's spaces between initials (#21) sometimes not (#22); sometimes there's no "." after the initial
 * fullstops after citation or not? (#35 vs. #33)
 * should probably put all refs into citation templates for consistency (eg. Lamont94)
 * current ref #48 (Collins, et al. p. 67.) should probably be listed in a "Cited books" section


 * Shouldn't "Menzies banksia" be "Menzies' banksia"?
 * I'll double check. My impression was that it lacked the apostrophe. It isn't a common alternative name anyway Casliber (talk · contribs) 06:38, 11 May 2010 (UTC)

Here are some further sources I found. Of course, including these aren't necessary for GA, but I would ask about them at FAC :) Sasata (talk) 20:58, 8 May 2010 (UTC)
 * this source says the height can reach up to 15 m
 * Hmm, not sure about this one. Consensus among offcial figures is 10 m, but there is one source I will double check. I checked the banksia atlas as if there was going to be any extra or different info, it'd come from there, and it had zero B. menziesii over 9.9 m, so I will discount this source. Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:11, 9 May 2010 (UTC)


 * according to this, Ellis Rowan also painted this banksia
 * nice find + added Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:11, 9 May 2010 (UTC)


 * this source mentions that B. menziesii is particularly susceptible to atmospheric pollution from SO2
 * nice find + added Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:11, 9 May 2010 (UTC)


 * this mentions an extremely low fruit:flower ratio in this species
 * added Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:35, 10 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: Water stress vulnerability of four Banksia species in contrasting ecohydrological habitats on the Gnangara Mound, Western Australia.
 * Author(s): Canham, C. A.; Froend, R. H.; Stock, W. D.
 * Source: Plant, Cell and Environment  Volume: 32   Issue: 1   Pages: 64-72   Published:  2009
 * more info about its phreatophytic nature
 * I emailed Professor Froend who was kind enough to email me a bunch of papers. I will double check but think it included this one A very technical paper on measuring the xylem pressure of four species of banksias. Very technical and quite esoteric. Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:11, 9 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: Covariation between intraspecific genetic diversity and species diversity within a plant functional group
 * Author(s): He, TH; Lamont, BB; Krauss, SL, et al.
 * Source: JOURNAL OF ECOLOGY  Volume: 96   Issue: 5   Pages: 956-961   Published:  2008
 * This was pretty general and covered alot of species - there was little specific to add I recall. Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:11, 9 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: Selective herbivory by mammals on 19 species planted at two densities
 * Author(s): Rafferty, C; Lamont, BB
 * Source: ACTA OECOLOGICA-INTERNATIONAL JOURNAL OF ECOLOGY  Volume: 32   Issue: 1   Pages: 1-13   Published: JUL-AUG 2007
 * This one was an experiment in fencing off seedlings of various species from herbivorous mammals in bushland near Perth. It showed that some menziesii was likely eaten. it is tricky to see how this adds anything specific to the article other than "there is evidence herbivores eat the seedlings" Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:59, 10 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: Microbial community composition and functioning in the rhizosphere of three Banksia species in native woodland in Western Australia
 * Author(s): Marschner, P; Grierson, PF; Rengel, Z
 * Source: APPLIED SOIL ECOLOGY  Volume: 28   Issue: 3   Pages: 191-201   Published:  2005
 * added. good one. Casliber (talk · contribs) 01:02, 11 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: Phosphite reduces disease extension of a Phytophthora cinnamomi front in Banksia woodland, even after fire
 * Author(s): Shearer, BL; Crane, CE; Fairman, RG
 * Source: AUSTRALASIAN PLANT PATHOLOGY  Volume: 33   Issue: 2   Pages: 249-254   Published:  2004
 * added Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:10, 9 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: Purification of anthocyanins from species of Banksia and Acacia using high-voltage paper electrophoresis
 * Author(s): Asenstorfer, RE; Morgan, AL; Hayasaka, Y, et al.
 * Source: PHYTOCHEMICAL ANALYSIS  Volume: 14   Issue: 3   Pages: 150-154   Published: MAY-JUN 2003
 * It's got cyanidin and peonidin-based pigments
 * added Casliber (talk · contribs) 21:03, 12 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: Banksia propagation. In-vitro multiplication of Banksia species.
 * Author(s): Tynan, K. M.; Scott, E. S.; Sedgley, M.
 * Source: Australian Plants  Volume: 21   Issue: 166   Pages: 79-82   Published:  2000
 * a little esoteric, but added Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:48, 12 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: Early lignotuber formation in Banksia - Investigations into the anatomy of the cotyledonary node of two Banksia (Proteaceae) species
 * Author(s): Mibus, R; Sedgley, M
 * Source: ANNALS OF BOTANY  Volume: 86   Issue: 3   Pages: 575-587   Published: SEP 2000
 * Added. Casliber (talk · contribs) 20:38, 12 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: Storage temperature affects viability of Banksia menziesii pollen
 * Author(s): Maguire, TL; Sedgley, M
 * Source: HORTSCIENCE  Volume: 32   Issue: 5   Pages: 916-917   Published: AUG 1997
 * Hmm - I can see the abstract here. Quite esoteric and I am trying (unsuccessfully) to see how/where it can be worked into the article. I am tempted to leave it out as just too specialised. What do you reckon? Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:58, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Looks pretty technical from reading the abstract, but this is one of the articles I can get in the library. I'll check the intro & conclusions and see if there's a take-home message about why the study is relevant, and add it in myself if it looks worthy. Sasata (talk) 04:59, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Ok I have the journal in hand. Basically, they were trying to develop a method to test pollen viability (to improve Banksia breeding programs) and used this species as a model. Quotes: "...Banksia pollen, after drying and storage over silica gel, can be stored relatively cheaply in a refrigerator or freezer long enough for breeding requirements. Storage above 0C is not feasible for more than a few weeks." "In vitro germination of B. menziesii pollen was not significantly affected at temperatures from 15 to 20C, perhaps reflecting natural conditions in the field environment during the flowering season." "Floret position on the inflorescence had no significant effect on pollen viability, so pollen can be collected from any part of the inflorescence, as long as the pollen is fresh." There ya go, I'll let you decide what, if anything, to do with that information :) Sasata (talk) 16:57, 20 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks for that. I think it is really veering away from material of interest to the general reader. I am thinking of how to make it relevant but it is tricky when I think of how to insert it into the article as is. Thanks for checking though as I will use the info when I start up my horticulture business ;)) Casliber (talk · contribs)


 * Title: COLOR VARIATION OF BANKSIA-MENZIESII BLOOMS FOR CUT FLOWER PRODUCTION
 * Author(s): BICKFORD, S; SEDGLEY, M
 * Source: JOURNAL OF HORTICULTURAL SCIENCE  Volume: 69   Issue: 6   Pages: 993-997   Published: NOV 1994
 * Not too fussed about this one. The colour variations are well documented elsewhere and have seen this cited. Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:53, 11 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: PISTIL STRUCTURE OF BANKSIA-MENZIESII RBR (PROTEACEAE) IN RELATION TO FERTILITY
 * Author(s): CLIFFORD, SC; SEDGLEY, M
 * Source: AUSTRALIAN JOURNAL OF BOTANY  Volume: 41   Issue: 4-5   Pages: 481-490   Published:  1993
 * Somewhat esoteric but some useful material added. Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:15, 11 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: SHOOT GROWTH IN RELATION TO CUT FLOWER PRODUCTION OF BANKSIA-COCCINEA AND BANKSIA-MENZIESII (PROTEACEAE)
 * Author(s): FUSS, AM; PATTISON, SJ; ASPINALL, D, et al.
 * Source: SCIENTIA HORTICULTURAE  Volume: 49   Issue: 3-4   Pages: 323-334   Published: MAR 1992
 * added Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:53, 11 May 2010 (UTC)


 * Title: FLORAL INITIATION AND DEVELOPMENT IN RELATION TO THE TIME OF FLOWERING IN BANKSIA-COCCINEA R BR AND B-MENZIESII R BR (PROTEACEAE)
 * Author(s): FUSS, AM; SEDGLEY, M
 * Source: AUSTRALIAN JOURNAL OF BOTANY  Volume: 38   Issue: 5   Pages: 487-500   Published:  1990
 * added Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:43, 11 May 2010 (UTC)


 * I just noticed this figure caption "The biggest threat to B. menziesii is clearing of land for housing" is not elaborated in the text, and needs a reference. Any more details? Sasata (talk) 05:15, 11 May 2010 (UTC)


 * One of the blindingly obvious issues is that much of its range is in the Swan Coastal Plain, much of which lies in the way of urban expansion of Perth. It is really sad driving around Perth's northern suburbs seeing swathes of bushland bulldozed and cleared for housing development. I spent a few hours trying to look for a decent reference online and it was surprisingly difficult. I did find a poster but was hoping for some government source. Will ask some folks in the know... Casliber (talk · contribs) 06:31, 11 May 2010 (UTC)


 * (update) rejigged and have a reference for issues of its range lying within urban development. Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:37, 13 May 2010 (UTC)
 * Ok, there's a few minor reference formatting details to take care of, and the image File:B menziesii dist map gnangarra.png should probably have more explicit source info (maybe just a link to the website) for FAC. Might also be good to shuffle the pics a bit so the three aren't clumped together at the start and the middle. And improve the "bark" caption :) Otherwise the article looks pretty good, and meets the GA criteria, so I am promoting it now. Sasata (talk) 05:27, 13 May 2010 (UTC)