Talk:Banksia paludosa/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ucucha 14:55, 11 May 2011 (UTC)

Will add comments hopefully in a few days. Ucucha 14:55, 11 May 2011 (UTC)


 * The Brown Antechinus has been split, and the populations south of Kioloa, New South Wales are now Antechinus agilis. See and  for the ranges of the two species.
 * Aha, Kioloa is well south of Barren Grounds, so it remains Brown Antechinus. Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:24, 12 May 2011 (UTC)


 * "Obovate" is defined on second, but not first occurrence.
 * done Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:24, 12 May 2011 (UTC)


 * First paragraph of "Description" is rather long.
 * just thinking about where to split nicely subject- and appearance-wise.... Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:54, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Perhaps separate paragraphs about the flowers and about the seedlings? Ucucha 15:12, 12 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Define "lignotuber" on first occurrence (it's defined in "Ecology", but is mentioned several times before that).
 * done Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:56, 12 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Anything else on differences (or lack thereof) from other species?
 *  adding and reffing to come added and reffed Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:54, 12 May 2011 (UTC)


 * The map makes it look like it occurs far south of Ulladulla, to the Victoria border.
 * ''Yes, it has a disjunct distribution, and the second population of subsp. paludosa is right on the victorian border. astrolux is almost contiguous (30 km apart) from larger northern area. Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:54, 12 May 2011 (UTC)


 * The map would be clearer if it did not show all of Australia, so the actual distribution could be shown in more detail.
 *  yeah, I'll fetch a map of NSW I think and go with that tonight sometime. done Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:54, 12 May 2011 (UTC)

Ucucha 18:47, 11 May 2011 (UTC)
 * First sentence of "Cultivation" is rather confused. Villa San Donato is not in England, and what is the nurseryman in Bristol doing there?
 * har har, rejigged Casliber (talk · contribs) 02:58, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
 * "private gardens in Clapham Common, Hackney by a nurseryman in Bristol" - some pretty strange geography there - could there be some connection with Clapton Nursery in Hackney maybe? Melburnian (talk) 05:24, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Nope - some other notable gardeners though....Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:48, 12 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks, that all makes sense to me now with the clarifications.Melburnian (talk) 15:26, 12 May 2011 (UTC)

I'm passing the article now, but do consider the last remaining comment. Ucucha 02:12, 14 May 2011 (UTC)
 * ''I rejigged it a little following your comment - I guess the question is whether to put a qualifier in front of the sentence about Italy like "Elsewhere in Europe," or "Outside of England," to distance it from the first comment about England. Or is it self-explanatory. Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:01, 29 May 2011 (UTC)