Talk:Banu Kalb/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 09:54, 6 January 2023 (UTC) §

Will take this up. Iazyges  Consermonor   Opus meum  09:54, 6 January 2023 (UTC)

Criteria
GA Criteria:
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 * 1.a   ✅
 * 1.b   ✅
 * 2
 * 2.a   ✅
 * 2.b   ✅
 * 2.c   ✅
 * 2.d   ✅
 * 3
 * 3.a   ✅
 * 3.b   ✅
 * 4
 * 4.a   ✅
 * 5
 * 5.a   ✅
 * 6
 * 6.a   ✅
 * 6.b   ✅
 * No DAB links   ✅
 * No dead links   ✅
 * No missing citations   ✅

Prose Suggestions
Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

 * It seems to me that the various "Kalb was" should be "Kalb were"? But perhaps I am wrong.
 * the Kalb became a leading component of the Yaman against the Qays suggest the Kalb became a leading component of the Yaman confederation against the Qays
 * a state which continued under the Iraq-based Abbasid Caliphate given the discussion of countries, state might best be changed to situation or circumstance for clarity

Locations

 * The Kalb's domination of Wadi Sirhan and al-Jawf well-positioned its tribesmen to migrate northward into Syria somewhat awkward, perhaps The Kalb's domination of Wadi Sirhan and al-Jawf put its tribesmen is a good position to migrate northward into Syria

Genealogy

 * The Kalb was the largest component in the northern half of the Quda'a's stomping grounds "stomping grounds" seems a tad informal for wikivoice, perhaps traditional areas. or something similar? (Also applies to caption from location section)

Interactions with Muhammad

 * confrontation was the 627 or 628 expedition against Dumat al-Jandal, suggest changing 627 or 628 to 627/628 since the dates are contiguous.

Alliance with the Qarmatians

 * Egypt-based Tulunids, who nominally ruled on behalf of the Abbasids. the placement of nominal could be confusing; they nominally ruled Egypt, or did so nominally in the name of the Abbasids? The second is correct IIRC, so perhaps Tulunids, who ruled Egypt, nominally on behalf of the Abbasids.

Relations with the Fatimids

 * playing a key role in the army of Anushtakin al-Dizbari previously just said Anushtakin and (I don't believe) introduced or linked; I linked to him and added a short intro. Please ensure details are correct. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  22:15, 9 January 2023 (UTC)
 * That is all of my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  22:16, 9 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you for reviewing and passing this nomination. I revised per the good suggestions above. Regards, Al Ameer (talk) 01:57, 10 January 2023 (UTC)