Talk:Barbarian II: The Dungeon of Drax/GA1

GA Review
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I plan on reviewing this article in the near future, most likely tomorrow.

Reviewer: Canadian   Paul  03:57, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

Okay, here we go...


 * GA review (see here for criteria)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

One of the best articles I've ever reviewed for GA! A couple small things:


 * 1) There are a couple of links in the article that go to redirects that need to be fixed: MS DOS, Compact audio cassette, Computer keyboard, Boots Group.
 * ✅ Jappalang (talk) 01:43, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Under "development" you write "The game was published there under the title Axe of Rage and included a tattoo in its packaging". The first question that came to my mind immediately was "of what?" Is that information available? If so, I think it would benefit the article to include it.
 * Unfortunately, no... the reviewers were impressed that the publishers included a tattoo, but failed to describe what the tatto was of. Jappalang (talk) 01:43, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) Not a big deal really, but just an FYI, when I moved to the United States and started using the word "marks", as in "Barbarian II received high marks...", no one had any clue what I was talking about. I know that this article is written in British English, but you may want to use another word, as it reads a bit colloquial to me. Or not, up to you. By the way, when looking up where you were from to make this comment, I noticed that you wrote Space Hulk (video game), which I also did the review for. Makes even more sense now why this article was so well written for the standards, you've been at this for a few years now!
 * No problem, changed "high marks" to the simple "praise". Jappalang (talk) 01:43, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * 1) A concern about prose, under reception you write "Because the difference between executing an attack and a movement was the pressing of the joystick button, they were irked to find their characters frequently switching directions instead of attacking with a low slash." You should rarely (if ever) start a sentence with "because", because it can almost always be replaced with "as" or "due to the fact that" etc. Here it makes the sentence awkward and difficult to read.
 * Used "as". Jappalang (talk) 01:43, 2 April 2010 (UTC)

Other than these minor concerns, I think that there's a bit of an issue with comma use, but that's more my personal opinion anyways and not a reason to hold back a GA. I'll put the article on hold for up to seven days, although I doubt that you'll need that long, to allow for these small things to be dealt with. Canadian  Paul  01:16, 2 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the compliments! I hope the article now meets the standards for a GA.  Jappalang (talk) 01:43, 2 April 2010 (UTC)
 * It most certainly does! Everything looks great now, so I am therefore passing the article as a GA. Congratulations and thank you for all your hard work! Canadian   Paul  01:56, 2 April 2010 (UTC)