Talk:Barona Band of Indians

Hi Aubrey - I'm giving you some feedback on this. GOOD START ON THIS. THE SECTIONS YOU'VE COMPLETED LOOK GOOD AND YOU'VE FIGURED OUT THE WIKIPEDIA FORMATTING. THE OPENING SECTION NEEDS SOME MORE SET UP. YOUR WRITING IS STRAIGHTFORWARD AND CLEAR BUT YOU HAVE SENTENCES THAT ARE CLAIMS THAT YOU CAN'T PROVE WITHOUT A CITATION. ALSO THINK ABOUT DETAILS AND BACKGROUND AN ENCYCLOPEDIA AUDIENCE NEEDS, SO MORE BACKGROUND ON SOUTHERN CALIFORNIA NATIVES IN GENERAL WOULD BE HELPFUL. YOU CAN USE LINKS TO GIVE PEOPLE SOME BACKGROUND.

THE NEXT STEP IS TO FINISH UP THE SECTIONS YOU HAVE LAID OUT HERE, BUT THE BIGGEST ISSUE IS FINDING MORE AND BETTER SOURCES. YOU DEPEND ON A COUPLE OF SOURCES ARTICLES SO YOU NEED TO SPEND SOME TIME FINDING AND ADDING TO YOUR REFERENCES AND CITATIONS. LOOK ON THE OU LIBRARY WEBSITE AND PLAY AROUND WITH SOME SEARCH TERMS, BEYOND Kumeyaay OR BARONA. THERE IS A LOT OF GOOD RECENT MATERIAL AVAILABLE ONLINE, ESPECIALLY MORE RECENT JOURNAL ARTICLES AND ALL OF THOSE ARE AVAILABLE ONLINE, ESPECIALLY ABOUT THE GAMBLING ISSUE.

ANNE HYDEAfh1858 (talk) 15:50, 21 April 2020 (UTC)