Talk:Barren Island, Brooklyn/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 09:09, 28 October 2018 (UTC)

Comments this is a very nice article, easily passing GA standards, so a few additional comments which would brighten it up and put it in good standing should an even higher level of recognition be desirable. That's it from me, nothing major at all. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:26, 28 October 2018 (UTC)
 * I think four paras in the lead is slightly too much for an article of this size, three would be fine.
 * I combined the last 2 paras. epicgenius (talk) 01:20, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Should the "outer barrier" be "Outer Barrier" like our article (to which it's linked?)
 * Yes. The article was moved after I made the initial additions to this page back in January. epicgenius (talk) 01:20, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * "By the 1920s... In the 1920s..." Consecutive sentences in the lead, a little repetitive.
 * Fixed.
 * ""Bears' Island".[6][3][7] " citations in numerical order.
 * Done.
 * "Map" is hardly a useful caption when it's clearly a map, perhaps some context for what extent the map shows?
 * Added context. epicgenius (talk) 01:20, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * "which is now a peninsula, is now the" is now, is now... again, just a little repetitive.
 * Fixed.
 * "Around c. 1800," is the circa needed since the uncertainty is already given by "Around"
 * Fixed.
 * "oil or scraps.[33][31]" numerical order again.
 * "until the 1930s.[36][31] " ditto.
 * "as 17 families.[40][38] ", "that year.[41][38] ", "grease, and soap.[48][46]", "1,500 people.[30][7][52]", "district there.[67][51] ", "on the island.[75][65] ", "on the island.[57][65][52]", "of the island.[81][52] ", "to move out.[85][65][86]" again.
 * All fixed.
 * I'm not convinced we need to link running water.
 * Unlinked.
 * "high–tide mark" not sure this should be an en-dash.
 * Not sure where the en-dash came from. I use a Dell and it doesn't allow me to type en-dashes. epicgenius (talk) 01:20, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * "Barren Island also received a National Jewish Book Award " unreferenced, and followed by an odd apostrophe.
 * This seems to have been included a few days ago. I added a source. epicgenius (talk) 01:20, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Avoid SHOUTING in the ref titles, and some of the bibliography.
 * Fixed.
 * NY Daily News -> New York Daily News
 * Fixed.
 * Ref 90, why is National Book Award in italics?
 * I don't know. I changed the parameter to "publisher" to get rid of the italics. epicgenius (talk) 01:20, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the review. I'll get on with the changes soon. epicgenius (talk) 16:14, 28 October 2018 (UTC)

Happy with the changes made and completely satisfied that this goes some way beyond the GA requirements, so passing now. Good work. The Rambling Man (talk) 12:27, 29 October 2018 (UTC)