Talk:Battle at Pozo Hediondo

Feedback from Dr. Hyde
'''You’ve made a good start here. I can see where you’ve added and rewritten some pieces, but the two key issues are adding more citations in general, but also deciding which parts of the article you want to focus on.'''

1)   Lay out the structure of your article or the new chunks of an old article with an Introduction and titles for the parts you want to add or rewrite.

'''I’m not sure how much you will be able to add here – maybe focus on adding new sources and citations and choosing a few of your potential new sections to finish? Make sure you put in dates and links to other Native peoples and battles. You could definitely write a conclusion that explains why the battle was important and leads to huge changes in the region.'''

2) Added new, high-quality sources (books, articles, authoritative websites)

'''THIS IS THE MOST IMPORTANT TASK LEFT: You need to find more recent scholarship about the Apache wars in the U.S. Mexico borderlands. There are some classic military histories of those wars, like Robert Utley’s Geronimo. New Haven: Yale University Press, 2012. ONLINE) and Robert Wooster’s The American Military Frontiers : The United States Army in the West, 1783-1900 . 2009 (ONLINE) Paul Hutton’s The Apache Wars : The Hunt for Geronimo, the Apache Kid, and the Captive Boy Who Started the Longest War in American History is pretty new. We have all these in the OU Library, but not all are online.'''

3)Written 50-60% of what you hope to add

I can see where you plan to take this, but the key task is finding and adding sources.

4) Thinking about linking as opposed to creating too much background

'''Here is where you might need to consider how much background people can get from other Wikipedia articles. I think you need more links to various tribal nations, wars that came before, etc.'''

5) Started to clean up a few paragraphs

You can decide whether you want to do this on the mainspace or in your sandbox, but the clean up and fixing spelling and writing errors takes a while.

GRADE FOR DRAFT (POINTS) : 70/80 Afh1858 (talk) 20:36, 10 November 2023 (UTC)