Talk:Battle of Appomattox Station/GA1

GA Review
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I'll be happy to review this article for GAC. H1nkles (talk) 17:44, 14 February 2009 (UTC)

GA Review Philosophy
When I do an article review I like to provide a Heading-by-Heading breakdown of suggestions for how to make the article better. It is done in good faith as a means to improve the article. It does not necessarily mean that the article is not GA quality, or that the issues listed are keeping it from GA approval. I also undertake minor grammatical and prose edits. After I finish this part of the review I will look at the over arching quality of the article in light of the GA criteria and make my determination as to the overall quality of the article.

Regarding Lead

 * In your last paragraph you identify Custer's forces as the Army of the Potomac, this is an overstatement, it was a portion of the army but by no means the entire army. Consider clarifying.
 * There is a clean up tag on the photo requesting more information on the author of the painting. Please take a look at this.
 * You don't mention in the Lead the ultimate result of the battle, the surrender of the Army of Northern Virginia. H1nkles (talk) 17:53, 14 February 2009 (UTC)

Regarding Background

 * Pretty thin, I don't see any connection between what is mentioned in the background and the events that lead to the battle in question. Please expand this section to include more information linking what is already mentioned in this section to the action at Appmoattox Station.  H1nkles (talk) 18:03, 14 February 2009 (UTC)

Regarding Prelude

 * The final paragraph is an actual description of the battle, it probably better belongs in the Battle section. H1nkles (talk) 18:03, 14 February 2009 (UTC)

Regarding Preparations for battle

 * Do you know which general was ordered to set up the line south of Appomattox court house?
 * Per WP:ACCESS the photo is supposed to fit within the section it is referring to. Lee's photo is too big and spills over into the section before it.  Consider resizing the photo to comply with MOS.
 * You mention only the Confederate preparations for battle, what about the Union side? H1nkles (talk) 18:57, 14 February 2009 (UTC)

Regarding Battle and Retreat

 * You say perhaps 100 confederate soldiers died but before you indicate the number will never be known. Is the 100 dead conjecture?  Your source (#15) does not mention any number of confederate dead.  The context makes it sound like this number is a complete guess, please remove this or cite it.
 * this sentence doesn't make sense, "The Battle of Appomattox Station commenced four hours[18] after it had started and lasted until dusk with varying intensity". A battle can't commence four hours after it started.  Commenced and started are synonymns.  Please reword.  H1nkles (talk) 18:57, 14 February 2009 (UTC)

Regarding Aftermath

 * I note a template that will need to be addressed in this section.
 * It also is very sparse, did this battle have any career impact on Custer? Is there anything else that could be added here?  H1nkles (talk) 18:57, 14 February 2009 (UTC)

Regarding Notes and References

 * they look fine links check out ok.

Overall Review

 * You have some issues with comprehensiveness, there's more that can be added, which I've mentioned above.
 * Check the photo issues that I mentioned above w/ clean up tag and MOS compliance.
 * I'll put the article on hold for a week to let you have time to consider what I've said here. Thanks for your hard work.  H1nkles (talk) 19:17, 14 February 2009 (UTC)

GA Fail
Since no work has been done in the time that the article has been on hold I am forced to fail it at this time. Please work on my suggestions and renominate. H1nkles (talk) 17:41, 23 February 2009 (UTC)