Talk:Battle of Arsuf/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: HueSatLum (talk · contribs) 23:51, 10 January 2013 (UTC)

I will review. Some issues:


 * More links are needed; entire sections are without links
 * The lead is overall too short; per WP:LEADLENGTH, it should be "two or three paragraphs".
 * I am not sure why "Sultan" links to Ayyubid dynasty.
 * "Mt. Carmel" → "Mount Carmel"
 * Add a convert for distances


 * Links: Items are in general only linked once in an article, the lower down an article you get the sparser are the links, as repetitions of terms and referents occur.
 * Lead: extended it to two paras.
 * Sultan: There is a difficulty here - you can talk of "King of England" but Saladin held Egypt and Syria in a sort of personal union, and there isn't a geographic or political entity called "Sultanate of Egypt and Syria" to refer to, just the dynasty. I have rearranged the sentence, it's a bit clunky but probably reasonable.
 * That's fine, I just wouldn't expect that to link there. HueSatLum 01:23, 12 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Mt.: OK, done
 * Distances: No idea how to this, I'm just a writer and I'm a computer-phobe.
 * ✅ HueSatLum 01:23, 12 January 2013 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * Good.
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * Plenty of references.
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * Covers all aspects of the battle.
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * Neutrally written.
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * Very stable.
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * Images are all free.
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Quite well-written and informative. HueSatLum 01:23, 12 January 2013 (UTC)


 * Many thanks for your help. Urselius (talk) 08:25, 12 January 2013 (UTC)