Talk:Battle of B-R5RB/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:34, 4 April 2016 (UTC)

I remember reading about this on the news back in the day. Never played Eve, but I love space MMOs and always wanted to play it! I'll have this finished soon. JAG UAR   21:34, 4 April 2016 (UTC)

≠===Initial comments===
 * "and was possibly the largest player versus player battle ever" - don't know if this is just me, but I thought that "ever" sounds a bit informal or unenecyclopedic to use. How about something like in history?
 * "Eve Online is a space game in which players engage" - needs mentioning that it is an MMORPG too; Eve Online is a MMORPG space game in which players engage
 * "and so deployed their entire Capital Fleet to the system" - should capital fleet be capitalised here? I could be wrong, so feel free to ignore this
 * "and the game's time dilation software kicked in" - informal, try initiated
 * "as the biggest and most expensive in EVE Online's history" - needs italicisation
 * "Dr. Eyjólfur Guðmundsson, an economist hired by CCP Games to oversee EVE Online's economy" - again, this needs to be italicised
 * "Pandemic Legion withdrew from the Southeast theater and struck a deal with the CFC" - bit informal, how about just made a deal
 * "Once the game went into downtime, developer CCP Games" - de-link CCP Games, as it already has been linked before
 * Ref 7 and ref 15 are both dead. Need archiving
 * No dab links

I'll leave this on hold until all of the above have been addressed. It was an interesting read! I wish I could get Eve Online. JAG UAR   17:59, 6 April 2016 (UTC)
 * I addressed all of these issues. Thanks!-- 3family6 ( Talk to me   &#124;  See what I have done  ) 02:17, 7 April 2016 (UTC)
 * Thanks! This looks good to go now.  JAG  UAR   17:18, 7 April 2016 (UTC)