Talk:Battle of Byram's Ford/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:02, 18 June 2021 (UTC)

Nice work on this one. A few comments: More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 12:41, 18 June 2021 (UTC) More to come. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 22:52, 18 June 2021 (UTC)
 * Something weird going on with the lead being below the TOC...
 * Fixed
 * Could you put an image in the infobox?
 * Done. I'd like to use File:Battle of the Blue by Benjamin D. Mileham.jpg, but I can't unfortunately because it may not be proveably PD
 * suggest reducing the to 3
 * Done (I think)
 * Lead
 * say what state it happened in in the first sentence
 * Done
 * link Union forces to Union Army
 * Done
 * Part of Price's for d ce
 * Done, as well as fixing a tense switch later in the same sentence
 * "of Brigadier General Joseph O. Shelby 's "
 * Done
 * "above the Union defenses at Byram's Ford "
 * Done
 * "Pleasonton broke through Marmaduke's position at Potato Hill "
 * Done
 * Body
 * suggest "The invasion was designed to start"→"It was hoped that the invasion would start"
 * Done
 * link infantry for infantrymen
 * I've already linked infantry in the last paragraph of the previous section; I'm not sure that the duplink would be necessary here
 * I would reorganise the explanation of the Confederate divisions in the order the commanders are named
 * Done
 * link militia
 * Done
 * active military movement operations
 * Done
 * "Sanborn commanded the unit formation"
 * Done
 * who was William Fishback?
 * Glossed (a militia officer)
 * "would not permit the Kansas State Militia from moving to move further east"
 * Done
 * "Confederate troops attacked the rear guard"
 * Done
 * "a feint attack on the northern part"
 * Done
 * "while forcing his way across the river"
 * Done
 * "Union skirmishers back across the Big Blue" the 2nd Colorado Cavalry?
 * Source doesn't identify the troops
 * "the 2nd Colorado Cavalry reported"
 * Done
 * suggest "two units from his brigade – Nichols's Missouri Cavalry Regiment and Schnable's Missouri Cavalry Battalion – to reinforce Thompson."
 * Done
 * "Colonel B. Frank Gordon and the his 5th Missouri Cavalry Regiment"
 * Done
 * did the ford where Gordon crossed have a name? Was his crossing opposed at all?
 * Neither Lause, Collins, Sinisi, Kirkman, or Monnett name the ford, so probably not. Added that the crossing occurred without incident.
 * "prevented from moving north by the Confederates" Slayback's battalion?
 * Source doesn't explicitly say this, referring to the Confederates who had poured through Hinkle's Ford
 * "but Moonlight failed to did not get the order" it is hardly a failure of Moonlight if he didn't get a message
 * Reworded, as possibly causing an indication of failure on Moonlight's part. "Failed to get/receive the order" is acceptable AmEng for when someone doesn't receive something even with no fault, though
 * "but was arrived at Hinkle's Ford"
 * Done
 * "so he sent Jackman's brigade to the south"?
 * Done
 * "way to Westport, ; and Shelby" as there is internal punctuation within the latter two parts of the sentence
 * Done
 * the header should read "October 23: Pleasonton crosses the river"
 * Corrected
 * "further to the west on a height known as Potato Hill" should say approx how far from the river, as it later becomes clear that it is only a short distance
 * Done
 * comma after "Battery H, 2nd Missouri Light Artillery Regiment"
 * Added
 * "Jackman withdrew from before in the face of Sanborn's brigade."
 * Done
 * comma after "Battery L, 2nd Missouri Light Artillery Regiment"
 * Added
 * "Lause estima g tes"
 * Corrected
 * Note c. "Potato Hill was renamed to Bloody Hill after the battle"
 * Done

The images are appropriately licensed. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Nice job thus far. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:03, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
 * - Replied to all points made so far. I'm hoping to run this one through ACR and maybe eventually FAC. Hog Farm Talk 03:36, 22 June 2021 (UTC)
 * This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by a maps and photographs with acceptable licensing and appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:08, 22 June 2021 (UTC)