Talk:Battle of Fort Davidson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 01:13, 19 November 2020 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:13, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
 * - Expect some changes to the Fort Davidson description. I've been revising the version at Fort Davidson per the GA review, so once I get that version finalized, I'll copy it over or such (with attribution if needed, of course). Hog Farm Bacon 03:01, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Would you like for me to hold off for a few days for you to take care of that? After diving so deep into the Rodney article, I have an itch to work on some short-lived British destroyers, so no rush on my end.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:46, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
 * No rush on mine, either. I'm taking finals this week, so I'd be a little slow on the response anyway. Hog Farm Bacon 03:52, 19 November 2020 (UTC)
 * - I've gotten the Fort Davidson stuff worked out, and the content here updated, so I'm ready for the review when you are. Hog Farm Bacon 23:58, 21 November 2020 (UTC)
 * OK.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:21, 22 November 2020 (UTC)


 * No DABs
 * Images appropriately licensed
 * Link brigadier general and major on first use
 * Done, I think
 * Major in the lede.
 * Oh, I thought you were referring to Major General for some reason. Fixed
 * While intended to occur together, the attacks happened in a disjointed fashion, and were repulsed. Awkward
 * Done
 * Better, but if they occurred separately, wouldn't they necessarily be repulsed separately?
 * I've tried again
 * After the Fort Davidson repulses, the Confederate troops had low morale, Awkward, perhaps something like "Dispirited by the failed assaults on Fort Davidson, ..." or some such
 * Done
 * repulses reads very oddly here.
 * Makes sense to me, but probably to nobody else. I've reworded it.
 * Hyphen in large scale
 * Done
 * poorly armed or unarmed proximity alert for "armed", maybe "or lacking weapons"
 * Done
 * More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 11:44, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * his and Colonel Thomas C. Fletcher's, commander of the 47th Missouri Infantry, political aspirations awkward
 * Done
 * Clarify that Fort Curtis was located further south near Arcadia
 * Clarified
 * fort's walls were 100 feet (30 m) needs an adjective here
 * Added
 * 10 feet (3.0 m) wide change this to 10 ft to format this properly
 * Done
 * doubled "wide"
 * Fixed.
 * the Confederate cannons fire on Fort Davidson fired?
 * Fixed
 * Clarify that the Confederates attacked from the south
 * The actually attacked from multiple different directions. Slayback from the north, and the ones coming down Pilot Knob attacked from the east, as well.
 * repulse them in piecemeal "one at a time" or "one by one"
 * Went with individually
 * in particular the 4th Missouri Cavalry Regiment and the 8th Missouri Cavalry Regiment trailing comma
 * Added
 * Alternate cannons with guns or artillery pieces, every so often
 * Rephrased two of the instances.
 * The repulses at For Davidson lowered the morale of the Confederate soldiers, and demonstrated that Price's army was of very low quality. awkward
 * Rephrased
 * Maybe it's just that I'm used to seeing "repulsed" and not "repulses", but that word still doesn't work for me here.
 * Is attempt #3 better?
 * Combine cites 45 and 46--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:27, 22 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Actually, one of the two was not the correct citation


 * - Thanks for the review. All points so far have been replied to, does anything else need further work? Hog Farm Bacon 05:47, 23 November 2020 (UTC)
 * A few minor issues remain.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 10:14, 24 November 2020 (UTC)