Talk:Battle of Groton Heights/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: JonCatalán(Talk) 05:48, 15 October 2010 (UTC)

Comments: Looks good, all around.
 * "British casualties were also high; General Arnold was criticized by his superiors for the number of casualties incurred." → I changed this to, "British casualties were also high, leading to criticism of General Arnold by part of his superiors."
 * "Arnold, who believed the fort could be easily taken when he ordered Eyre to seize it, reached a prominence from which he could see its defenses, and realized that it was more complete than anticipated, and that taking it would not be easy." → This came off as overly complicated, so I changed it to the following, "General Arnold ordered Eyre to assault the fort, believing the fort would fall easily. However, upon reaching a prominence from which he could see its defenses, Arnold realized that the fort was more complete than anticipated and that taking it would not be easy."
 * "On the return of the second flag..." → What does this mean?
 * Clarified The flag is previously mentioned; I've added "parley" to clarify meaning.  Magic ♪piano 00:54, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
 * "The damage done to New London was substantial: one estimate placed the value destroyed at nearly $500,000..." → What dollar value is this in?
 * Comment Randall doesn't say, but it is presumably contemporary dollars. I've added a sentence including the official state assessment.  Magic ♪piano 00:54, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
 * I did some other relatively light copyediting, as well.

JonCatalán(Talk) 20:07, 15 October 2010 (UTC)


 * Your changes look fine to me, I've added things to clarify the other issues.  Magic ♪piano 00:54, 17 October 2010 (UTC)
 * Alright, looks good then. I will promote shortly. JonCatalán(Talk) 06:09, 17 October 2010 (UTC)