Talk:Battle of Imbros/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:25, 28 November 2009 (UTC) Kitchener had been dead for over a year and a half by the time of this battle. More detail is need on the actual damage suffered by Yavuz and what it inflicted on the British ships as well as the air raids made by the British against her before I can pass this as GA. Read through the WP:MOS carefully, you need to spell out numbers less than ten, IIRC. More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:25, 28 November 2009 (UTC)
 * The Kitchener in command of this battle was the nephew of the Lord Kitchener who died in 1916. Henry Franklin Kitchener, Viscount Broome was the heir to the earldom after his father inherited it in 1916 but he himself died before assuming the earldom. He used the courtesy title of Viscount of Broome so his name is styled as Lord Kitchener. I'd link the name to the appropriate page, but it doesnt yet exist.
 * I can add a bit more about the air raids, although they were entirely ineffective. Only 8 hits were claimed to be scored, and all the nonbiased sources state that they caused only superficial damage.--XavierGreen (talk) 19:46, 28 November 2009 (UTC)
 * I know that they were ineffective, I've read a fairly detailed account of the attempts, but the reader should know about them as well. Redlink the son nephew, as a general he's notable enough for his own article. His title should have changed to Earl the minute his father died, even if he wasn't formally invested with the title by the King, but that's a minor point that I'm not prepared to quibble about. Get a hold of the second edition of Ian Buxton's Big Gun Monitor for a good tactical account of the battle.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:02, 28 November 2009 (UTC)
 * I added a bit more in regard to the airaids, still searching for that book though.XavierGreen (talk) 20:46, 2 December 2009 (UTC)
 * Failed for lack of completeness.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:39, 1 January 2010 (UTC)