Talk:Battle of Piercebridge/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 19:01, 13 July 2020 (UTC)

I'll have a look at this. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:01, 13 July 2020 (UTC)

I will copy edit a little as I go. Shout if I mess anything up.
 * Cheers, undid one change; I'm not a fan of "comprised of". Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "The Battle of Piercebridge was a battle in". Maybe 'The Battle of Piercebridge was fought in'?
 * Ahem, yes, of course. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "atop"! Gadzooks! Perhaps 'on'?
 * Oh, come on, who doesn't like a bit of flowery prose from time to time? Made it boring for you. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Link First English Civil War in main article.
 * Done. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "and preparing for battle". "battle" or 'war'? (An open question.)
 * I think either could be used, but "war" is probably better. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "after fleeing London" Optional: → 'after fleeing from London'.
 * The "from" seems redundant. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "Unlike the fractured state of Yorkshire" I'm not sure about "fractured". Maybe 'disputed', or 'unclear situation in' or similar?
 * Gone with "disputed" at the moment. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Is the size of Howard's force known?
 * No, frustratingly. It is commonly just recorded as a victory of 6,000 over 500 ish, but that is a false narrative; hence why I haven't included numbers in the infobox for this one. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "from where they could force a crossing by weakening the enemy defences around the bridge". "from where they could force a crossing" seems very PoV. Suggest 'from where they could weaken the enemy defences around the bridge'.
 * Fair, trimmed. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "The Battlefields Trust" Lower case t.
 * Done. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Link barricaded.
 * Done. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "concentrations of lead shot found" Is it known when?
 * Sadly not. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * "He subsequently defeated a Parliamentarian force commanded by Fairfax at the Battle of Tadcaster." Is there a reason why you don't say when this took place?
 * Honestly? Because I apparently forgot to expand the Aftermath section when I went back over this article! I've added the date for Tadcaster for the time being, but will add more later. Harrias  talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Page range for Bleiberg & Soergel?
 * Added, and fixed link to where I originally found it. Looks like someone updated it on one of my articles, and I've been copying it around like this ever since. I think the link given should make it free to access, but could you confirm?
 * I do that fairly frequently. It is now open access.

Harrias talk 12:09, 15 July 2020 (UTC)

More to follow. Gog the Mild (talk) 11:29, 15 July 2020 (UTC)

The aftermath could indeed do with a bit of expansion, but it makes it for GA. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 12:19, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks : do you think with some more work on the aftermath this might be suitable for ACR? Harrias  talk 12:23, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
 * , sure. Gog the Mild (talk) 12:25, 15 July 2020 (UTC)