Talk:Battle of Ticinus/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 14:24, 31 August 2020 (UTC)


 * Lead
 * Link Iberian where Iberian cavalry is first mentioned, not where Iberia is later mentioned?
 * Done.


 * Primary sources
 * "Livy, who relied heavily on Polybius[15], - punctuation before ref
 * Done.


 * Pre war
 * Is there a pre-war map which has the labels in English, not in French? The map's not particularly helpful when you have to try to puzzle out the map key
 * Not as accurate. I have cropped English map of the Med down. That better?


 * Link Sardinia and Corsica.
 * Done.


 * I feel like a brief mention of the Mercenary War would be relevant here.
 * As background to a battle on a different continent 20 years later?[!] You sure? I mean, I can do it easily enough, but ...


 * War in Cisalpine Gaul
 * Is there a link for Tannetum?
 * No. And so far as I am aware it only turns up in connection with this event - it is "an obscure village" - so I didn't red-link it.


 * Carthage invades Italy
 * "marching north in May 218 BC He entered Gaul to the east" - Missing a full stop
 * Done.


 * Link the Rhone?
 * Done.


 * The Gallic revolt image is titled in Latin, is there one with an English title? Also, the place names are in Latin, while they are in English in the article of course.  Potentially confusing.
 * It is in Latin. I give place names in the article in Latin. Apart from the title it seems serviceable to me. It is not in any other language, nor are there alternatives. So if you dislike it enough I can remove it, but I can't replace it.


 * "Believing that he would therefore be facing a much larger Roman force than he had anticipated Hannibal felt an even more pressing need" - Comma after anticipated?
 * Done.


 * Opposing forces
 * "Hannibal had recalled all of his scouts and raiding parties[62] and took with him an exclusively cavalry force which including almost all of his 6,000 strong mounted contingent" - But I thought that Hannibal had 8,000 cavalry with him?
 * No. As the article says, he started over the Alps with 8,000, but only 6,000 arrived in Italy.


 * "Many would be from North Africa which" - I think were is superior to would be here
 * OK.


 * "It was the long-standing Roman procedure to elect two men each year, known as consuls, to each lead an army." - It would almost make more sense to include this earlier, when you're first discussing consuls.
 * You are right. Done.


 * Battle
 * "Scipio, who had gained a low opinion of the Carthaginian cavalry from the clash near the Rhine" - The Rhine? I'm assuming you mean the Rhone, right?
 * Yes. Typo. Fixed,


 * "possibly by still having a javelin man riding into battle behind each of the cavalrymen, as was their tradition." - Nix "as was their tradition", as this has already been stated
 * Nixed.


 * Aftermath
 * It seems logical to include a brief statement about how the war ended. Battle of Drepana, which is a FA, includes one about how the First Punic War ended.  The reader is left hanging here, wondering what happened.
 * Done. Note that the dup link to Scipio junior is deliberate. Let me know if you don't like it.

That's it, I think. Good work. Hog Farm Bacon 14:38, 2 September 2020 (UTC)


 * Thanks, appreciated. Your points all addressed above. Gog the Mild (talk) 15:21, 2 September 2020 (UTC)
 * - Looks good now. Passing. Hog Farm Bacon 15:31, 2 September 2020 (UTC)