Talk:Battle of Xuân Lộc/GA1

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 17:57, 8 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "File:18thARVNsoldiersatxuanloc by Dirck Halstead.jpg" The source is dead.
 * (Comment) Added archive link. Kges1901 (talk) 18:46, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , it's still dead. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:23, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Turns out that the photo is still available online, so I've added the migrated webpage address. Kges1901 (talk) 19:36, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , cheers. Gog the Mild (talk) 19:48, 8 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Image captions which are not sentences should not end in a full stop. (Period.)
 * Fixed. Mztourist (talk) 03:12, 9 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Cite 5 has something wrong with the formatting - the publisher should not be in italics.
 * (Comment) Made that small correction. Kges1901 (talk) 18:47, 8 April 2020 (UTC)

Which variety of English is this written in? Gog the Mild (talk) 17:57, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I've gone through and standardized to American English. Mztourist (talk) 03:47, 9 April 2020 (UTC)

I will do some copy editing as go through. As usual shout if I mess anything up.

I may be a little slower than usual in working through this one.


 * "This was the ARVN III Corps' last defensive line of South Vietnam's capital" I suspect a missing word, possibly 'east'.
 * The lead seems to jump a bit chronologically. See here for a suggested rewording. Feel free to edit.
 * The name(s) of the North Vietnamese commander(s) should be in the lead.
 * The "Viet Cong" are named as participants in the infobox, but on a skim I can't see them in the lead nor the main article.
 * Gog All done, thanks! Mztourist (talk) 03:25, 10 April 2020 (UTC)

Gog the Mild (talk) 19:35, 9 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "all the provinces in South Vietnam's I and II Corps" This doesn't make sense.
 * "all over the battlefield" Optional: → 'across the country'.
 * "equipped with forty-two artillery guns" Each, or in total?
 * "the 9th Infantry Division commenced their attack" "their" → 'its'.

Got to the end of Prelude. Gog the Mild (talk) 15:41, 12 April 2020 (UTC)


 * "Trần Văn Hương was appointed President, and he was ordered to seek a negotiated peace with North Vietnam at any cost" Ordered by whom?

Mztourist, five last comments or queries. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:28, 15 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks Gog all done. Mztourist (talk) 04:10, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

Some of your best work. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 09:33, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks Gog! best regards Mztourist (talk) 10:12, 16 April 2020 (UTC)