Talk:Battle of Yongyu/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: AustralianRupert (talk · contribs) 12:04, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this article over the next couple of days. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 12:04, 6 October 2011 (UTC)

Progression

 * Version of the article when originally reviewed:
 * Version of the article when review was closed:

Technical review

 * a (Disambiguations): b (Linkrot)  c (Alt text)  d (Copyright)
 * no dabs found by the tools;
 * ext links all work;
 * some images have alt text, but others don't per . It is not a GA requirement, but you may consider adding it in if you get a chance;
 * the automated copyright tools are down at the moment, but I don't believe that there are any issues WRT copyright here. I have done some Google search spot checks throughout the article, and nothing came up that concerned me. AustralianRupert (talk) 08:00, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Gday, I've added the alt text now, thanks for reminding me. If you could pls have a look at it and let me know what you think that would be appreciated. Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)

Criteria

 * It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS):
 * generally looks quite good to me prose and MOS wise, but I have a couple of suggestions (below);
 * in the lead, the second sentence of the first paragraph is quite long and might be broken up: "The battle was fought between the..."
 * Yes that was a long sentence, I've split it now. Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The Korean War began in the early morning of 25 June 1950" - this might sound better as "The Korean War began early in the morning of 25 June 1950..."
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * not sure about this (and similar instances): "envisioned US 1st and 3rd Battalions, 187 RCT" - should it have a definate article (i.e. "the" in front of the unit?)
 * Added this now. Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * this doesn't quite make sense: "An unmanned SU-76 self-propelled gun was also found nearby, neither of which had any petrol" (neither of which implies two subjects, but the sentence only appears to have one);
 * Reworded. Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "still well to the rear, 27th British Commonwealth Brigade " - might need "the" before "27th";
 * Done. Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "line of march" - I wonder if this should be hyphenated. I'm not sure, to be honest;
 * Not really sure either, the source that uses it doesn't hypenate it though so I've left it as is. Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "decimating ROK II Corps at the Onjong and encircling" (not sure about "the Onjong" here - maybe just "Onjong");
 * Removed "the" as it was a typo (and one I had repeated in two other GA articles without it being picked up!).
 * in the References, the Coulthard-Clark work probably needs an edition number - I think it is the 2nd edition, but I'm not sure?
 * Not sure how I missed that, fixed now. Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)


 * It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * all paragraphs and all major facts are covered by citations;
 * citations are to reliable sources;
 * I do not believe that there is any original research in the article. AustralianRupert (talk) 08:00, 7 October 2011 (UTC)


 * It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * No coverage issues. AustralianRupert (talk) 08:00, 7 October 2011 (UTC)


 * It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * a (fair representation): b (all significant views):
 * No issues WRT point of view. AustralianRupert (talk) 08:00, 7 October 2011 (UTC)


 * It is stable.
 * No edit wars etc.:
 * No issues with stability. AustralianRupert (talk) 08:00, 7 October 2011 (UTC)


 * It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
 * a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images):  c (non-free images have fair use rationales):  d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:
 * Good use of images to break up text. If possible it would be great if one could be added to either the "British and Australians advance to Yongju" or the "North Koreans attempt to break-out" sections (suggestion only);
 * Agreed. I'll keep looking! Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "File:Richard G Wilson.jpg" - probably needs a date if one could be found (even an approximate if necessary). AustralianRupert (talk) 08:00, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Added the date now, thanks for pointing that out. Forgot to check the images I didn't upload myself! Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Overall:
 * a Pass/Fail:
 * Overall looks like a fine article. Just a couple of things to cover off on, I believe. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 08:00, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks for taking the time to review my work, please let me know what you think about my changes. Anotherclown (talk) 12:07, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * They look good to me. I have passed the article now. Good work and good luck with taking it further. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 21:23, 7 October 2011 (UTC)