Talk:Batuka (song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 11:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)

Should do this article today or tomorrow --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:43, 5 July 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Target Batuque to Batuque (music and dance)
 * Remove the formats
 * Remove target on Madonna Ciccone per WP:OVERLINK
 * Link to the music video in the infobox
 * "It was written by Madonna" → "The song was written by Madonna
 * "and produced by Madonna and Mirwais" → "while produced by Madonna and the latter of the three"
 * ""Batuka" features the" → "It features the"
 * "group who play drums" → "group that play drums" with the appropriate wikilink removal since it is obvious
 * "and lyrically it deals about" → "and the lyrics of the song are about"
 * "received positive reviews" → "received generally positive reviews"
 * Only one reviewer called it "hypnotic"; try and replace this with something else, though I may have further comment(s) about that once you have
 * "An accompanying music video for the song was" → "An accompanying music video was"
 * "and tried to recreate the" → "which was an attempt to recreate the"
 * "met the group and" → "met the Batukadeiras Orchestra, as well as"
 * ""Batuka" was included on" → "The song was included on"
 * "with the Batukadeiras Orchestra in a semi-circle playing drums" → "with the group performing in a semi-circle, playing drums,"

Background and recording

 * On the text box, add a dash before Madonna's name to present the quote better
 * "In these sessions, they" → "In the sessions, they"
 * "its members ranked from teenage girls" → "the members ranged from teenage girls"
 * "Madonna described their first encounter as an" → "Madonna described her first encounter with them as an"
 * "experience. The music was" → "experience". She continued, stating that the "music was"
 * Remove target on Madame X
 * "which she encouraged them to just repeat" → "that she encouraged the Batukadeiras Orchestra to "just repeat""
 * Remove wikilink on translator
 * "according to the singer, they" → "according to Madonna, the group"
 * "that they all pray together" → "on everyone in the studio all praying together"
 * "they blessed Madonna" → "the Batukadeiras Orchestra blessed Madonna"
 * "commented about the moment," → "commented on the moment,"
 * "encounter it was"." → "encounter it was."" since that is a full sentence quotation
 * Target feminist to Feminism
 * "because she felt it sounded" → "due to her feeling it sounded"
 * "called it "Batuka" because" → "retitled the song to "Batuka" because,"
 * "played by women"." → "played by women.""

Composition

 * Retitle to Composition and lyrics
 * "Madonna, Mirwais Ahmadzaï and David Banda" → "Madonna, Mirwais and Banda" with the appropriate target
 * "production was in charge of the singer and Ahmadzaï" → "production was handled by the singer and Mirwais"
 * "David was the only one" → "Banda was the only one"
 * Target batuque to Batuque (music and dance)
 * [6][7] should both be solely at the end of the sentence
 * "It features drums played" → "The song features drums played" with the removed wikilink
 * [8][9] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [1]
 * "with the orchestra singing their own solos in Cape Verdean Creole language" → "with the group singing their own solos in the Cape Verdean Creole language"
 * "Its lyrics deal about" → "The lyrics deal with"
 * [8] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [10][11]
 * "The line "Get that old man/put him in a jail/where he can’t stop us" was" → "The lyrics "Get that old man/put him in a jail/where he can't stop us" were"
 * "reference to the current" → "reference to current"
 * [12][15] should both be solely at the end of the sentence

Critical reception

 * "According to Nicholas Hautman of Us Weekly, the song" → "Nicholas Hautman of Us Weekly stated the song"
 * [17] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [18]
 * "Opinion that was shared" → "C.M.'s opinion was shared"
 * "Nick Smith, it" → "Nick Smith, the song"
 * [20] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [21]
 * "According to Xavi Sancho from El País, the Batukadeiras Orchestra" → "Xavi Sancho from El País wrote that the Batukadeiras Orchestra"
 * "that "Batuka" successfully" → "that the song successfully"
 * "as well as calling it" → "while calling it"
 * "opined it" → "opined that the song"
 * "that accompanied by the" → "that her accompanied by the"
 * "Kristi Kates from Northern Express newspaper" → "Kristi Kates of the Northern Express newspaper"
 * "was also positive," → "was similarly positive,"
 * "noted that "Batuka" was one" → "noted that the song was one"
 * "Wren Graves of" → "In a mixed review, Wren Graves of"
 * "to the song, but called it" → "to "Batuka", though called the song"
 * "came from Daniel Megarry from" → "was provided by Daniel Megarry from"
 * "who classified it" → "who ranked it"
 * "Zilch"." → "Zilch.""

Music video

 * "Filming for the music video for "Batuka"" → "Filming of the music video for "Batuka"" with the wikilink
 * "in April 2019, in" → "during April 2019 in"
 * "Julião, in" → "Julião of"
 * "who also directed the music video" → "who was also director of the video"
 * Add year in brackets for "Dark Ballet"
 * [32] should be solely at the end of the sentence after [16]
 * Remove wikilink on Refinery29
 * "how she met the group" → "how she met the Batukadeiras Orchestra"
 * "looked like a typical house" → "looked like a typical one"
 * "as their first meeting place," → "for their first meeting place,"
 * "She elaborated that she hoped it" → "Madonna elaborated, stating that she hoped it"
 * "and how "expressive" she" → "as well as how "expressive" she"
 * "and how she wanted to capture it in their" → "and having wanted to capture it in the"
 * Img needs alt text
 * "The video begins with the following message:" → "The music video begins with a message that reads,"
 * "upon the women of the orchestre," → "on the women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra,"
 * "as they sing, beat out" → "while they sing, beat out"
 * "looking out to the" → "from which the group look out to the"
 * "Madonna dances freestyle," → "Madonna performs a freestyle dance,"
 * "and joined them"." → "and joined them.""
 * "Upon its release, it received" → "The music video was met with"
 * "Little Black Book website called the video" → "Little Black Book website staff called it"
 * "and deemed it as a" → "while they deemed it as a"
 * "Justin Ravitz from Refinery29 called the video" → "Ravitz branded the visual"
 * [16] should be solely at the end of the sentence before [35][36]
 * "labeled it as" → "staff both labeled it as"
 * "noted how it references" → "noted how the video references"
 * "Portuguese newspaper Público opined that" → "The staff of Público opined that"
 * "According to Mike Nied from Idolator, "I'd say that she has" → "Mike Nied from Idolator said that "she has"
 * "felt from the group" → "felt from the Batukadeiras Orchestra"

Live performance

 * "fourteen of the twenty two women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra" → "14 of the 22 women of the Batukadeiras Orchestra while performing"
 * "It began with the Orchestra gathering around" → "The performance began with the group gathering around"
 * "was sitting to the side" → "sat to the side"
 * "and doing some" → "and they did some"
 * I rewrote it as "and she did some" because Madonna was the one dancing, as ref 38 says Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)


 * Think you could add the date of the performance somewhere?
 * The performance was part of a tour which happened between 2019 and 2020, as stated in the article Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)


 * [41] should solely be at the end of the sentence before [42]
 * "while according to Spencer Kornhaber from The Atlantic it was" → "while Spencer Kornhaber from The Atlantic said it was"

Credits and personnel

 * Wikilink Madonna to herself
 * Target vocals to Singing
 * Credits and personnel adapted from the Madame X album liner notes.[4] → Credits and personnel adapted from the liner notes of Madame X.[4]

Final comments and verdict

 * after a nice review of this one! --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:24, 6 July 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅; take a look above Alex reach me! 02:02, 9 July 2020 (UTC)
 * ✅ after the successful fixes! --Kyle Peake (talk) 05:51, 9 July 2020 (UTC)