Talk:Beat of My Drum/GA3

GA Review
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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 17:57, 30 January 2012 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (references): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:

Info box

 * Provide a caption for the alt parameter, explaining what is it on the artwork.
 * Use June 3, 2011 for the release date.✅
 * Use for the length of the song.✅
 * Songwriters actual names should be used for the Songwriter parameter✅

Lead

 * → "Beat of My Drum" is a song by British recording artist Nicola Roberts, from her debut album Cinderella's Eyes (2011). It was released as her debut single on 3 June 2011, via Polydor Records.
 * Again, writers should have their actual names listed. So, Diplo should be Thomas Pentz.
 * "However, the production was unsuccessful, and Roberts contacted Diplo, who then assisted, producing the final version of the song" → This could be better.
 * Do you want me to c/e the lead? Because It needs to be rewritten.
 * If you feel it needs to be re-written, go for it. But User:J Milburn c/e the entire article pretty throughly and I think it looks pretty good. But you are the reviewer so it's up to you! -FeuDeJoie (talk) 17:40, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
 * I've got absolutely no objection to copyediting going ahead. The article's not perfect. J Milburn (talk) 18:01, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
 * Okay. Also, could you perhaps put a ✅ next to points you have...done please? I see you have done the info box points by looking at the revision history, but I wouldn't have known otherwise. Thanks. Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One 18:10, 6 February 2012 (UTC)
 * OKay. I will do this last. Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One 13:29, 10 February 2012 (UTC)
 * I have done a c/e.

Background and development

 * "Before starting her solo career, Roberts was one fifth of the girl band Girls Aloud." → The band hasn't split up, they are still together.
 * "The experience led her to start to develop her debut album,[2] which, lyrically, reflected the difficult times she experienced in Girls Aloud." → Bad phrasing.
 * To be honest, this section needs copy-editing too. The flow is really bad. Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One 14:10, 10 February 2012 (UTC)
 * I've done a c/e. Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One 12:46, 5 March 2012 (UTC)

Release and reception

 * "on air on sale" → What are the quotation marks here for? ✅
 * method on 3 June 2011, the way that Universal Records, by which Polydor is owned, were releasing all of their new work at this time. → method on 3 June 2011. Universal Music, the record company which owns Polydor, were releasing all singles under this format at the time of "Beat of my Drums release. ✅
 * A means of combatting illegal downloading, the method was new to Roberts. → The reason for this was to try and reduce the level of illegal downloading of music, a system that Roberts was not used to. ✅
 * After her time in Girls Aloud, she was used to releasing a song after around six weeks of promotion, including radio, television and print. → As part of promoting singles in Girls Aloud, she was used to releasing a song after approximately six weeks of promotion, which included radio interviews, televised performances and print work. ✅
 * She said it was "very scary" to release a song without this publicity. Further, Roberts was concerned about the effect of this kind of release on chart positions. → As a result, Roberts stated that that the new system was "very scary" as she was not used to releasing a song with comparatively little publicity, and worried about how her "Beat of My Drum" and subsequent singles would chart. ✅
 * In an interview published by Digital Spy, she said "I think it's harder for the public now because it's always been about the chart position. I also think it takes the excitement out of the charts because it's not a competition anymore."[8] → What does this have to do with the release? ✅
 * Is the entire first paragraph support by that one reference (FN8) at the end? You should put a reference at the end of each sentence really, because at the moment it just reads like WP:OR.✅


 * The song has received positive reviews from critics. → "Beat of My Drum" garnered positive reviews from music critics. ✅
 * Robert Copsey, writing for Digital Spy, gave the song → Robert Copsey for Digital Spy gave the song ✅
 * A writer from website → Remove "website" ✅
 * Lots of quotes, paraphrase some please.
 * Dean Piper of → Dean Piper for ✅
 * Michael Cragg, writing for The Guardian, → Michael Cragg for The Guardian ✅
 * in the United Kingdom → Remove ✅

Accolades

 * It's only a short section so I copy-edited it.

Music video

 * I'm just going to c/e this one as well.
 * Need an alt description for the picture.
 * Need a source for Morgan as the director.
 * Make sure you include sources at the end of sentences.

Live performances

 * Roberts performed the song on 2011's T4 on the Beach, and this was her first live solo performance. → Roberts performed "Beat of My Drum" for the first time at the 2011 T4 on the Beach in the United Kingdom.
 * Asked whether she was nervous about the performance, she said she had → After her performance, the singer was asked how she felt it went, saying
 * I did a slight c/e of this section.

Formats and track-listings

 * Remove the templates to make (iTunes pre-order bonus track) small. Looks out of place as everything else is normal size font apart from the writers for "Disco Blisters and a Comedown". ✅

Charts

 * Change section title to "Chart performance" ✅
 * Make a subsection entitled "Charts" ✅
 * Put a comma after "United Kingdom" ✅
 * the song → "Beat of My Drum" ✅
 * on the issue date of 18 June 2011. ✅
 * Put a comma after "week" ✅
 * Put a comma after "64" ✅
 * and continued falling in its third week placing at number 88. → and fell to number 88 in its third week.
 * falling is the present tense, fell is the past. This happened in the past. Plus, it makes more sense to read. Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One
 * Put a comma after "However" ✅
 * on 16 July 2011, the fourth week it rose to number 76 and again in its fifth week where it charted at number 50. → the song rose to number 76 in its fourth week, and again to number 50 in its fifth. ✅
 * the single → the song ✅
 * on the chart, → on that countries singles chart, ✅
 * date for Ireland? ✅

Release history

 * Link CD single ✅
 * Link Polydor Records ✅

Summary
The references are pretty bad to be honest. It warrants a fail. But I will place on hold for 7 days. Aaron  &bull; You Da  One 12:36, 5 March 2012 (UTC)
 * Sorry but I am failing the article. 7 days have passed without an improvement. The references are quite poor and is a grounds for a fail in itself. If you amend this concerns when it best suits you are re-nominate, it should pass with next to no concerns. Aaron  &bull; You  Da  One 12:39, 12 March 2012 (UTC)