Talk:Beatlemania in the United Kingdom/GA1

GA Review
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Hello, I will be reviewing this article. Check back soon for a full review! Carpet Crawler message me  23:07, 28 May 2009 (UTC)

GA on hold
This article looks good, but I have a few concerns.

- In the lead, might want to wikify that Julian fellow, he may be pretty well known. ;)
 * Done. PL290 (talk) 17:41, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- Also, can you expand the last paragraph of the lead? Maybe even put that sentence into another paragraph? It makes it look stubby.
 * Done. PL290 (talk) 17:41, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- the "guitar groups are on the way out, Mr. Epstein" comment is cute. :)
 * Done: removed "guitar groups" quote, and instead cited The Decca audition where it is done more justice.PL290 (talk) 17:51, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- In the "Please Please Me: the breakthrough" section, combine that sentence into the paragraph. Also, the statement needs a source.
 * Done: combined paras + added missing citations. PL290 (talk) 18:17, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- "Two of the nationwide tours were led by popular American stars, but at every show during both tours, the crowds would not stop screaming for The Beatles, who proved even more popular than the American stars." Are the names of the American stars known?
 * Done: added the U.S. artists' names. (They are the ones in the 2nd and 3rd nationwide tours. I'd "over-summarised" by leaving the names out of the Lead; they definitely do belong there though, I agree.) PL290 (talk) 18:25, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- "Three months after "Please Please Me", The Beatles recorded their first album, also titled Please Please Me (1962). The follow up single, "From Me to You", became the band's first undisputed #1 song, which marked the pattern of only releasing singles which would not appear on the group's original albums in the UK." This paragraph is stubby, please combine or expand it. :)
 * Done: moved "Please Please Me" album sentence to "Please Please Me" single section + dropped next sentence as it's an anomaly in this article (focus is not 1962-63 discography; there were numerous others). PL290 (talk) 20:42, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- Once again, might want to wikify Lennon's son in the "1963: a year of touring" section.
 * Done.PL290 (talk) 18:48, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- for the "February 1963: first nationwide tour", once again, combine the one sentence paragraph into the other paragraph.
 * Done.PL290 (talk) 18:48, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- do the same as above for the "March 1963: second nationwide tour" and "May 1963: third nationwide tour" sections.
 * Done.PL290 (talk) 18:48, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- Could you combine or expand the last three paragraphs of the "November 1963: fourth nationwide tour" section? They are all 1-2 sentence paragraphs.
 * Done. Moved the Royal Variety Performance sentence later to facilitate this.PL290 (talk) 18:48, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

- All of the website citations need to be properly formatted using the cite web template.
 * Done. PL290 (talk) 20:42, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

Also, citation number 42 is a deadlink, and needs to be fixed.
 * Done. It had 2 deadlinks and is of sundry interest so I have removed it. PL290 (talk) 20:42, 30 May 2009 (UTC)

Until my concerns have been addressed, I will place this article on hold. Please leave me a message on my talkpage if you have any questions, or if you have addressed my concerns. Thanks, good work, and good luck! Carpet Crawler message me  23:37, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Thank you. I'm away from home and will be on the road shortly so I'll expect to address your points in detail later today. I'll update them individually here as I go and then put something on your talk page as you request once I'm done or if I have any queries. PL290 (talk) 07:50, 30 May 2009 (UTC)
 * Thanks for these improvement points. I have now applied updates in response to all your comments as above, and I've improved a couple of other stubby paras along the way as I see what you mean. Please let me know if there are any remaining issues. PL290 (talk) 20:42, 30 May 2009 (UTC)
 * The article looks much better! Give me an hour or so, and I will re-read it and give my final decision. Carpet Crawler  message me  23:01, 31 May 2009 (UTC)

GA pass
OK, the article looks great now, so I will pass it! Great job with fixing everything up! I'm very happy to see an article of such importance get very good coverage. Keep up the great work, thanks, and congratulations! Carpet Crawler message me  18:47, 1 June 2009 (UTC)
 * Excellent news! Many thanks for your review; the article is the better for your helpful suggestions and I learned a few things along the way. Thanks again! PL290 (talk) 19:04, 1 June 2009 (UTC)