Talk:Ben Lugmore/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:56, 3 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments That's it for first pass. On hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 11:31, 4 April 2020 (UTC)
 * The lead is a little short. I would also expect to see all those refs in the main body rather than in the lead.✅ - fixed refs so they are all from the body; expanded text
 * a "horseshoe-shaped" massif - this doesn't need to be a quote as it's purely factual. ✅
 * "anglicization" British English -> anglicisation. ✅
 * I would look to merge the naming/geology sections as the former is just a single sentence. ❌ - am going to expand these two sections slightly, they also mirror a format used on much of the Irish mountains?
 * " the Mweelrea Formation, and " why italics? Our article doesn't do that. ✅
 * " are tufts, " again, why italics? ✅
 * In the infobox, spaces between the facts and references should go. That may be a template issue which needs fixing. ❌ - it is a template thing (I have taken out any space possible and still no effect?)
 * Geography section is a series of single-sentence paragraphs which is too proseline for me. ✅ - may not have fully addressed this but tried to combine into paragraphs and expanded some text.
 * Corrie is not linked first time in the main part of the article. ✅
 * "of the "horseshoe" that " again, not needed in quotes really. ✅
 * "sharp "airy" summit " according to whom? This quote may be applicable but to whom is it attributed? ✅ - Provided attribution (two authors use it)
 * "is thus like of a " odd phrasing, what about "is like that of a"? ✅
 * "100 Highest Irish Mountains," this is in italics in the article and not italics in the infobox. ✅
 * "6-kilometre" convert. ✅
 * "13-kilometre" ditto. ✅
 * In fact there are several conversions needed in this section.✅
 * " a notable Irish guidebook" if it's notable, can we say what it is? Does it have an article? ✅ - It doesn't have an article (perhaps might do later), however, have taken out "notable", and also added another guidebook that lists it as a top three.
 * "(or point 495-metres)." what does this mean? ✅ - clarified that it is a point on the OS map
 * " (e.g. above The Ramp)," e.g.? ✅ - better wording
 * "VS to E2" you explained terms like D before, so these need explanining. ✅
 * Some of the see also links are already linked in the article (e.g. list of Marilyns). ✅
 * Ref 7 has a spare quote mark. ✅
 * Refs seem to be hard-split, just let reflist do its thing unmodified.✅
 * "Mayo - A Walking" should be an en-dash in both places. ✅
 * "DoBIH" is overlinked. ✅

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Thank you for that, which all made sense to me. I think I have addressed them all, except that I would likt to keep the naming and geology sections separate as it follows the format used by other Irish mountains and I have a little more to contribute in each one? Also, the infobox spacing appears to be a template thing. Thanks again for your attention ! Britishfinance (talk) 10:33, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Just realising that I have not fixed the lede (your first point), which am doing now. Britishfinance (talk) 11:34, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Done this now. Britishfinance (talk) 11:49, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * All good, I removed a bunch of duplicate links and a spare, but I'm happy with the article so promoting. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 12:13, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Much appreciated :) Britishfinance (talk) 12:14, 6 April 2020 (UTC)