Talk:Benedict Joseph Fenwick/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Babegriev (talk · contribs) 23:24, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

Introduction
Hi Contributors! I will be reviewing this article within the week and look forward to reading it. Feel free to drop a message on my talk page with any concerns. Thanks! Babegriev (talk) 23:37, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

Overview
Sorry for the delay. Most suggestions are minor, and overall this article is in very good shape. Article is coherently structured and well-written for a wide range of audiences. The article is formatted with the style of other comparable bishopric and clergy-related articles, integrates appropriate infoboxes and templates, and is effectively illustrated.

Lead Section
Effective summarization. Well written and eloquent.

Please consider removing the period after Cathedral in: "original St. Patrick's Cathedral. and later as".
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  03:48, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Early Life
"His cousin was Bishop Edward Fenwick." is an abrupt end to that paragraph. Perhaps combining it with the preceding sentence, as they both pertain to his family's involvement as clergy. Alternatively, consider including a brief notation of what makes Edward Fenwick notable, as done with Enoch.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  04:09, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

At the end of the section, "He and his brother were among the first six..." implies that they were among the first six overall restored jesuit novices. Please confirm that this is correct, as the Lord source is unclear as to whether they were among the first 6 overall, and happened to be at Georgetown, or if they were among the first 6 Georgetown novices. Perhaps a bit of context for a slightly broader audience would be appreciated.
 * Clarified.  Ergo Sum  04:11, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Ministry in New York
- "...Jesuits in the United States could not sustain..." -- was this meant to be "in the United States to sustain...'" or "in the United States and could not...?"
 * Yes, clarified.  Ergo Sum  04:12, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

- Wikilink to Pastor can be removed from the start of the last paragraph in this section, given the context provided herein.
 * I link it because pastor does have a precise meaning within Catholic canon law that some other Christian denominations tend to use more loosely. The pastor article explains this.  Ergo Sum  04:13, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

- "Fenwick succeeded him as pastor of St. Peter's Church as well." -- It might be helpful to make it more clear that Fenewick was responsible for both St. Peter's and St. Patrick's simultaneously. The timeline of this paragraph is somewhat unclear.
 * Rephrased that part of the paragraph so that it should be clearer.  Ergo Sum  04:16, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

- "and John Power would become the next pastor of Old St. Peter's in 1825" -- Did you mean St. Patrick's? Perhaps also include a note on the vacancy noted in in the succession box.
 * Corrected.  Ergo Sum  04:17, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Bishop of Boston
- "priests in the diocese had increased to 24 by this time" -- By what time?
 * Added year.  Ergo Sum  04:21, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

- Link to First Provincial Council of Baltimore can be directed to Provincial Councils of Baltimore for specificity.
 * I made the redirect itself more specific.  Ergo Sum  04:25, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

- "and chose as the name of the new school the College of the Holy Cross, in honor of the original Boston cathedral" -- Consider rewording. Along the lines of "and named the new school the College of the Holy Cross, in honor...". Simpler would probably be better here.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  04:22, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

- ""Memoirs to Serve for the Future Ecclesiastical History of the Diocess of Boston." However, this was never published during his lifetime." -- Combine to single sentence. 2nd sentence is a dependent clause.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  04:23, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

- "An effigy of Bishop Fenwick" -- consider a wikilink to effigy.
 * Done.  Ergo Sum  04:24, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

Summary of Review
Babegriev (talk) 15:37, 27 November 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you, . I believe I've addressed all your comments.  Ergo Sum  04:26, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
 * Looks good! Nicely written article! Babegriev (talk) 04:46, 20 January 2021 (UTC)